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How to Blow Minds and Lose Lovers
Permeate nature's membrane
in the wide blue sheath
out of the grey,
The wind carries in smoke
from wildfires, North,
the stagnant hint
of wildweeds in the air.
This day's got me feelin'
like novacaine
with a bump of cocaine
but it's still hard to feel alive
in this neck'a the woods-
ironic I wrap my hand
around the trachea of today
and strangle life out
like wringing a towel
or milking a cow.
Continue past the end of the pines
and swandive off the cliffside.
Teach me to fly
with those broken bony wings.
I can't promise much,
and I may follow,
but freefalling makes the spirit grow.
A child stood by the edge,
and walked away before you fell.
The child sees
what we need to see,
This child knows
what we need to know.
I disappeared for days, weeks, months,
and when I return they say;
Where've you been? Where've you gone?
I smile like I know a secret,
tell em';
I've been here all along
in the wide blue sheath
out of the grey,
The wind carries in smoke
from wildfires, North,
the stagnant hint
of wildweeds in the air.
This day's got me feelin'
like novacaine
with a bump of cocaine
but it's still hard to feel alive
in this neck'a the woods-
ironic I wrap my hand
around the trachea of today
and strangle life out
like wringing a towel
or milking a cow.
Continue past the end of the pines
and swandive off the cliffside.
Teach me to fly
with those broken bony wings.
I can't promise much,
and I may follow,
but freefalling makes the spirit grow.
A child stood by the edge,
and walked away before you fell.
The child sees
what we need to see,
This child knows
what we need to know.
I disappeared for days, weeks, months,
and when I return they say;
Where've you been? Where've you gone?
I smile like I know a secret,
tell em';
I've been here all along
Published 8th Jul 2015
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Anonymous
8th Jul 2015 2:58am
This is deep but very good. I love the ending too.
8th Jul 2015 4:48am
8th Jul 2015 4:03am
aha....
wee
got a new 'talent' here
just keep writing on, respond to comments, be generous & deferential in your comments, & STAY AWAY from 'the Forums'..that's where the 'good', but mostly ignorant, ego-splattering occurs 'in earnest....I done seen some pretty darn interesting writers leave this 'place' after getting caught up in controversies of stupid-human poe'tree tricks....... but of course, I'm just joking....ahemmmmm
wee
got a new 'talent' here
just keep writing on, respond to comments, be generous & deferential in your comments, & STAY AWAY from 'the Forums'..that's where the 'good', but mostly ignorant, ego-splattering occurs 'in earnest....I done seen some pretty darn interesting writers leave this 'place' after getting caught up in controversies of stupid-human poe'tree tricks....... but of course, I'm just joking....ahemmmmm
8th Jul 2015 4:50am
Thank you for the feedback and advice! I haven't explored a whole lot yet, although despite the warning I may have to see what these forums are all about >:)
8th Jul 2015 4:42am
An excellent debut entry! Very filled with depth and emotion... I enjoyed giving it a read, I must say. The part that reads:
"Where've you been? Where've you gone?
I smile like I know a secret,
tell em';
I've been here all along"
It is very true, that sometimes when we go in search of something whether it be a greater truth or a more mundane goal... upon our return some people may take notice and others not so much. But to the seeker, it can be so utterly transformative that it can actually seem as if the journey was so short as to have been in the blink of an eye. In such a moment, it can seem as if one had never left at all... particularly if one finds oneself and figures out where and how they belong. As I said... this is very deep poetry you've penned here! And doubtless every reader can and will find their own meaning too.
Welcome to Deep Underground! Keep writing works of this quality and you'll be sure to have a great following before long. Big welcome to you!
"Where've you been? Where've you gone?
I smile like I know a secret,
tell em';
I've been here all along"
It is very true, that sometimes when we go in search of something whether it be a greater truth or a more mundane goal... upon our return some people may take notice and others not so much. But to the seeker, it can be so utterly transformative that it can actually seem as if the journey was so short as to have been in the blink of an eye. In such a moment, it can seem as if one had never left at all... particularly if one finds oneself and figures out where and how they belong. As I said... this is very deep poetry you've penned here! And doubtless every reader can and will find their own meaning too.
Welcome to Deep Underground! Keep writing works of this quality and you'll be sure to have a great following before long. Big welcome to you!
8th Jul 2015 4:55am
No doubt it can be interpreted in several ways. I really like what you got from it. Very similar to what I had in mind relating to the different perspectives of a particular 'journey' to the one who goes on the journey, and those who stay behind. I greatly appreciate your kind words and warm welcome! Looking forward to spending more time around here!
