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Him
He loves me, yet I cannot return the feeling
I want to, trust me
He knows that, but cant accept it
He wants more.
I need him
I love him
Like a brother
I can't go on with out him
I miss him daily
I want to, trust me
He knows that, but cant accept it
He wants more.
I need him
I love him
Like a brother
I can't go on with out him
I miss him daily
Published 3rd Jul 2015
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3rd Jul 2015 10:53am
Leave of the 'ME" with capital letters at the t op of the second verse. You don't need that word at all to get your point across. Without it you have a finely crafted poem of melancholy and regret. Hope that helps!
3rd Jul 2015 9:37pm
Thanks. That did help. I didnt realize that the ME was shouting until I readit again.
