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Wasted Nights ~
Stale air,inside and out
no crowds tonight,it's a
dead night,most hide in
the whiskey shadows
She takes the path that leads her
out of town,
They'll meet on the outskirts,
on the moon
An angel,maybe,a bad broad
in all the good ways
He makes it easy to write on
his heart
She was cold rain,
beautiful,a pain in the ass
He needed her,
Her curves, feeling like satin
Her madness,freeing him from
his suit
A vintage mistress with a past
A flesh covered demon
no crowds tonight,it's a
dead night,most hide in
the whiskey shadows
She takes the path that leads her
out of town,
They'll meet on the outskirts,
on the moon
An angel,maybe,a bad broad
in all the good ways
He makes it easy to write on
his heart
She was cold rain,
beautiful,a pain in the ass
He needed her,
Her curves, feeling like satin
Her madness,freeing him from
his suit
A vintage mistress with a past
A flesh covered demon
Written by
tommielynn
(Tommie Lynn)
Published 29th Jun 2015
| Edited 30th Jun 2015
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Re: Wasted Nights ~
Tommie this is vintage sexy at its best.Thrillingly naughty! I love the story and the imagery is so alluring.
"Her curves, feeling like satin
Her madness,freeing him from
his suit"
Wow! Wow! Wow!
"Her curves, feeling like satin
Her madness,freeing him from
his suit"
Wow! Wow! Wow!
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30th Jun 2015 2:02am
I'm crazy mad for the old movies,can watch them all day!
Guess that just tells you how boring I truly am. ;)
Thank you GW :)
Guess that just tells you how boring I truly am. ;)
Thank you GW :)
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30th Jun 2015 5:14am
Hell no! Those are some of the best! It would be fun to write a short story in that style. I can see you donning a fedora and pencil skirt :)
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29th Jun 2015 11:48pm
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30th Jun 2015 00:08am
An excellent and concise little noir. "She was cold rain, / beautiful, a pain in the ass." Darkly alluring then a quick slap in the face. Who knows where these nights will lead?
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30th Jun 2015 2:05am
Hopefully these night's lead into delightful mornings.
A girl can dream,thanks for reading me crowfly :)
A girl can dream,thanks for reading me crowfly :)
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30th Jun 2015 5:40am
a slick step into noir with the poem & the artwork, Tommie. I'm strolling thru the shadows & stopping at her past...
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2nd Jul 2015 4:22pm
I need to make some room on my reading list. How incredible your mind is,this conjured a silent squeal out of my throat, well more like squeezed it out. Lovely lovely stimuli.
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