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Sir
He poured into me
With desperate rhythm of yearning and breath
Sweet pleasure then pain and back again
He commanded, and so I hung on like death
"Say my name little girl."
"and yes please must be your response"
He smelt of sin and sweat and terrified me
I hated him, then loved him at once
With desperate rhythm of yearning and breath
Sweet pleasure then pain and back again
He commanded, and so I hung on like death
"Say my name little girl."
"and yes please must be your response"
He smelt of sin and sweat and terrified me
I hated him, then loved him at once
Published 22nd Jun 2015
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22nd Jun 2015 6:01am
it's a very proper poem for a submissive, except that the 'S' shld be capitalized...
22nd Jun 2015 7:09am
The S on Sir, yes. I didn't notice id done that thank you!
What exactly do you mean by proper Mr. Felder?
What exactly do you mean by proper Mr. Felder?
22nd Jun 2015 7:15am
the pleasure & pain, being obedient, & knowing you loved it & you loved him for making you realize it...
22nd Jun 2015 7:22am
Yes, that is why I loved him. Thank you for your time. I took a minute to read a couple of yours. Lovely. She walked hard on his heart, like that.
22nd Jun 2015 11:03am
22nd Jun 2015 11:59am
I've actually not read that, although I am a fan of erotic literature. But I'm grateful for your comments. Thanks.
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27th Jun 2015 9:25am
"I Dabble in poetry..." Yea, n them who write it
like their lives depend on it should wish
they'd "Dabble" as you do lady! :)
like their lives depend on it should wish
they'd "Dabble" as you do lady! :)
27th Jun 2015 11:48am
27th Jun 2015 11:46am
Wow! I'm honored by that compliment! And you could say my life depends on it. If I don't do things like draw, act, write, I lose myself
thank you
thank you
15th Jul 2015 6:13pm
15th Jul 2015 6:20pm
15th Jul 2015 8:59pm
Sir and Master are the same man. I called him master until he told me to address him as Sir. There will be more adventure. 💋
Anonymous
- Edited 3rd Aug 2015 11:04pm
3rd Aug 2015 10:31pm
Welcome to DU!! Wow Jen.....awesome sexy write......sounds like a luv and hate relationship......interesting last line......enjoyed xo :)
3rd Aug 2015 11:43pm
Thank you! But it was all love. The BDSM relationship is an intense role play, but a very real and trusting relationship if you have a good, and most importantly safe one. Spiritually, mentally, and physically. Appreciate the read and compliment! 💋
3rd Aug 2015 11:44pm
Thank you! But it was all love. The BDSM relationship is an intense role play, but a very real and trusting relationship if you have a good, and most importantly safe one. Spiritually, mentally, and physically. Appreciate the read and compliment! 💋
Anonymous
29th Nov 2015 2:43pm
All the way in the back...sweet desperate honest truth...this piece is the one I've been reading through for my dear.
29th Nov 2015 3:32pm
I.dont write about a master, or my submission during the relationship.
Read lesson 1. My first date with Sir. And O
They are ours.
No one elses.
Read lesson 1. My first date with Sir. And O
They are ours.
No one elses.
21st Apr 2020 2:49pm
