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Thanks for Talking
Push and pull
rhythm of waves
a dance of thoughts
lasting for days
debate verbose
conclusions made
now I stand
foundation laid
Like alchemist
turns lead to gold
like mother's milk
enriched my soul
like messiah cures
and mends the lame
so too did you
by words exchanged
*my submission to a challenge found on this site, after a bit of reworking.*
rhythm of waves
a dance of thoughts
lasting for days
debate verbose
conclusions made
now I stand
foundation laid
Like alchemist
turns lead to gold
like mother's milk
enriched my soul
like messiah cures
and mends the lame
so too did you
by words exchanged
*my submission to a challenge found on this site, after a bit of reworking.*
Published 19th Apr 2015
| Edited 22nd Apr 2015
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Anonymous
19th Apr 2015 11:19pm
What's an alchemist?
20th Apr 2015 00:01am
an alchemist is sort of like a mystical scientist, who believed they could balance certain materials to do things like turn lead to gold, and make potions to cure disease. The philosopher's stone which you may have heard of, is a legendary alchemist's artifact said to be the key to doing this stuff.
Anonymous
20th Apr 2015 00:05am
Sounds good. I can imagine these words sung to a screaming rock song. All the rhymes work & they are all in the right places for maximum rhythmic effect. This one was born to rock!
20th Apr 2015 3:22am
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22nd Apr 2015 2:25am
