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Under the Skin
She was dark
A mysterious seductress
Consuming the bones and blood of men
Reducing them to lifeless hollow skins
Left to drift in the void of her heart
So beautiful her cover was
Irresistible her eyes, her curves, her... HER
They followed her flesh
Like a scent a dog could not resist
Without realizing the black widow in her
Was hiding beneath a sheath
Like a spider in its web
Luring its mate into a trap of desire
To feed its hunger on the lust of lovers
Oh that skin, that soft and sensual skin
What lies beneath will surely end in a fiery sin
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*(for the comp: Skin)
jj
A mysterious seductress
Consuming the bones and blood of men
Reducing them to lifeless hollow skins
Left to drift in the void of her heart
So beautiful her cover was
Irresistible her eyes, her curves, her... HER
They followed her flesh
Like a scent a dog could not resist
Without realizing the black widow in her
Was hiding beneath a sheath
Like a spider in its web
Luring its mate into a trap of desire
To feed its hunger on the lust of lovers
Oh that skin, that soft and sensual skin
What lies beneath will surely end in a fiery sin
______________________
*(for the comp: Skin)
jj
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Re: Under the Skin
8th Apr 2015 9:53am
I wrote this for the competition "Skin". If you have not seen the movie, "Under the Skin", you absolutely must see it. There are references to the film in this poem that will make more sense after you see it, and to the actress who is in it, but I don't want to say who it is. When you realize who she is, you will say, "oohhhhhhhhh..."
Have fun!!!
JJ
Have fun!!!
JJ
Re: Under the Skin
8th Apr 2015 9:54am
Very creative and I love the imagery and the last line is great! Well done.
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Re: Under the Skin
8th Apr 2015 3:32pm
I did see Under The Skin, it was indeed, an amazing movie. Sleeper hit.
You've created great imagery here, and her involuntary actions, of the instinct to hunt. Nice one!
You've created great imagery here, and her involuntary actions, of the instinct to hunt. Nice one!
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8th Apr 2015 3:38pm
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8th Apr 2015 9:47pm
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8th Apr 2015 10:33pm
Thanks David! I agree completely!!! I have pretty much stopped commenting on erotica that is in your face or bdsm. The movie I based this poem was basically an erotic movie with a sci-fi twist and an actress that brings it in every film she's ever done, but it doesn't have to be porn to be sexy. Her next movie is coming out in a month and I can't wait... jj
Re: Under the Skin
2nd May 2015 3:54am
Didn't see the movie but I felt the poem stood very well on its own. The poem is dark but expertly penned. It's very unique.
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2nd May 2015 9:12pm
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Re. Under the Skin
22nd Dec 2015 6:18pm
Sounds like quite a temptress! I haven't seen this movie. I'll have to check it out.
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22nd Dec 2015 7:56pm
It's not like any other movie I have ever seen. Very bizarre but it keeps your attention. I will warn you though, i think it is R rated and there is an attempted rape scene that is kind of intense and weird. Making it all the more strange, it's a Sci-fi film. JJ
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22nd Dec 2015 8:37pm