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Curious
Curious
The conversation ended as it always began, with one word. Why? I always began it with how I finished it, with my resignation. Her questions were endless about rainbows and stars, and how come she could swim like a fish but couldn't fly like a bird. Sometimes I'd cheat and say ask your mother. She tells me she did and her mother said to ask me.
You want me to ask God again daddy. She sucks on her lower lip, doe eyed and waiting. No I tell her, just wait till I'm there. We'll ask him together. Go to sleep, daddy has to go to work in the morning.
hide and seek
counting to ...
forgiven
The conversation ended as it always began, with one word. Why? I always began it with how I finished it, with my resignation. Her questions were endless about rainbows and stars, and how come she could swim like a fish but couldn't fly like a bird. Sometimes I'd cheat and say ask your mother. She tells me she did and her mother said to ask me.
You want me to ask God again daddy. She sucks on her lower lip, doe eyed and waiting. No I tell her, just wait till I'm there. We'll ask him together. Go to sleep, daddy has to go to work in the morning.
hide and seek
counting to ...
forgiven
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Anonymous
5th Apr 2015 11:14pm
there is much honesty in this brief write. well done. very well done.
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6th Apr 2015 1:38am
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6th Apr 2015 2:23am
LSP, mo chara chotha`imid,
i can truly f e e l a certain wistfulness...a particular poignancy within this piece--regarding that fleeting, precious time of life...childhood.
Lines of love,penned with the heart...a scribe straight from your soul--to be sure!
i can truly f e e l a certain wistfulness...a particular poignancy within this piece--regarding that fleeting, precious time of life...childhood.
Lines of love,penned with the heart...a scribe straight from your soul--to be sure!
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6th Apr 2015 6:06am
go gcoinní Dia i mbois a láimhe thú
go gcasfar le chéile sinn arís
... This is my great wish for her. So glad you could feel it.
go gcasfar le chéile sinn arís
... This is my great wish for her. So glad you could feel it.
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6th Apr 2015 6:32am
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Anonymous
6th Apr 2015 6:36am
An angel with no wings...
Hauntingly beautiful, well penned LSP.
Hauntingly beautiful, well penned LSP.
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6th Apr 2015 7:07pm
Thank you Vee ... I greatly appreciate your thoughts and words on this. And thank you ever so much on the RL add.
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6th Apr 2015 10:15am
Ah Lo...such a beautiful write...could see it unfold in my minds eye....thank you... :)
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6th Apr 2015 7:09pm
I'm glad it came across vividly ... I was trying to write it as haibun and was worried not using quotation marks would muddle it all.
Thanks for the read Kate.
Thanks for the read Kate.
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3rd Aug 2015 2:05pm
Reminds me when I was young and my dad worked in the Yukon to provide. He would be gone for months at a time. When he came home he tried his best to be patient but he was tired. BUT he found the time to teach us; he found the time to hug us; he found the time....
This write made me tearful. Thank you.
This write made me tearful. Thank you.
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3rd Aug 2015 4:53pm
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6th Sep 2015 00:22am
Lsp I have to tell you, this made me cry...
This poem is so powerful and soft it took me off guard..
Well said and beautifully written...
In the list..
Zazzles
This poem is so powerful and soft it took me off guard..
Well said and beautifully written...
In the list..
Zazzles
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6th Sep 2015 1:32am
Thank you for your kind words and RL add Zazzles ... I'm touched that you felt it on such a deep level ... because she is forever mine.