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i doubt about love...
Maybe i expected to much outa love.
I should of never put love on such a high pedistool.
I should of known better.
Is it really worth all the pain in the end?
I was better of never chosing love.
I can certainly live life with out it.
Or..can I?
Should i blame love for everything, or me?
I let myself fall into it.
I let it become into a trap of emotions.
Even though i want out.
Im to deep in.
I dont want it..its to much..
But then again, im not sure.
I should of never put love on such a high pedistool.
I should of known better.
Is it really worth all the pain in the end?
I was better of never chosing love.
I can certainly live life with out it.
Or..can I?
Should i blame love for everything, or me?
I let myself fall into it.
I let it become into a trap of emotions.
Even though i want out.
Im to deep in.
I dont want it..its to much..
But then again, im not sure.
Published 17th May 2011
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17th May 2011 12:23pm
i know how that feels...
not knowing whether you want love or not...
it being so good, yet so bad at the same time...
it really is confusing :(
very well put
not knowing whether you want love or not...
it being so good, yet so bad at the same time...
it really is confusing :(
very well put
17th May 2011 7:45pm
24th Aug 2011 7:04am
You got the positives and negatives of love And put them into this poem.
Which is beautifal keep it up
Which is beautifal keep it up
28th Aug 2011 3:31am
19th Jul 2012 5:41pm
i doubt about love...
Maybe i expected too much outa love.
I should've never put love on such a high pedestal.
I should've known better.
Is it really worth all the pain in the end?
I was better off never choosing love.
I can certainly live life without it.
Or….can I?
Should i blame love for everything, or me?
I let myself fall into it.
I let it become into a trap of emotions.
Even though i want out.
I'm too deep in.
I don't want it….it's too much..
But then again, I'm not sure.
There is a law of diminishing returns with language: If you let it go too far, the reader gets to feeling neglected. Misspellings can be helpful if the point is to sound a certain way. Naivte can be helpful, but not at the expense of the reader. Some adults will try to draw childlike drawings or make handwriting look childlike by using the left hand or off hand; but no one is fooled because of the level of sophistication involved. Pick a level for each poem and stay on it like a laser. I've left the small "I" for affectation, that keeps the tension, but in everything else, craftsmanship is the calling. Poems are like finely tuned machines that when they are constructed well, can purr like a cat and dance like a star. rt87
Maybe i expected too much outa love.
I should've never put love on such a high pedestal.
I should've known better.
Is it really worth all the pain in the end?
I was better off never choosing love.
I can certainly live life without it.
Or….can I?
Should i blame love for everything, or me?
I let myself fall into it.
I let it become into a trap of emotions.
Even though i want out.
I'm too deep in.
I don't want it….it's too much..
But then again, I'm not sure.
There is a law of diminishing returns with language: If you let it go too far, the reader gets to feeling neglected. Misspellings can be helpful if the point is to sound a certain way. Naivte can be helpful, but not at the expense of the reader. Some adults will try to draw childlike drawings or make handwriting look childlike by using the left hand or off hand; but no one is fooled because of the level of sophistication involved. Pick a level for each poem and stay on it like a laser. I've left the small "I" for affectation, that keeps the tension, but in everything else, craftsmanship is the calling. Poems are like finely tuned machines that when they are constructed well, can purr like a cat and dance like a star. rt87
23rd Oct 2012 3:03pm
