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voices of the hand
touch of your hand
smoothness flows
roughness shows
feelings grow
without a word
I glow
you grow
tender touch
feels me up and down
I know this wont be
are last round
you answer every question I have
with your tongue
sliding between my legs
as you come in close
our hands fondle us both
I touch you
I touch me
your in deep
warm showers
between my legs
I love the way
you protect my head
from falling off the bed
the voices of your hands
make me shiver and quiver
flow like a cream filled river
baby im always in
demand of your hands
smoothness flows
roughness shows
feelings grow
without a word
I glow
you grow
tender touch
feels me up and down
I know this wont be
are last round
you answer every question I have
with your tongue
sliding between my legs
as you come in close
our hands fondle us both
I touch you
I touch me
your in deep
warm showers
between my legs
I love the way
you protect my head
from falling off the bed
the voices of your hands
make me shiver and quiver
flow like a cream filled river
baby im always in
demand of your hands
Published 31st Mar 2015
| Edited 1st Apr 2015
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1st Apr 2015 1:50am
1st Apr 2015 3:55am
1st Apr 2015 10:32am
Okay I'm going to offer some honest but tender critique. I don't know if the title has an apostrophe on purpose but if not you need to change that from a possessive to a noun (voices). Also you wrote 'Are hands fondle us both'. Was that also intentional? If not it should read 'our hands fondle us both' Other than those two little grammatical nitpicks it was a lovely write and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
1st Apr 2015 2:03pm
lol I cant spell for shit so its no big deal and our hands hum yep that's in the right spot
2nd Apr 2015 8:29am
I love the way
you protect my head
from falling off the bed
That line grabbed me, the way someone else grabbed your hair. It's the little touches, the delicate fingertips barely meeting, even while below the waist everything's cranking at the highest rate of torque. It's tiny considerations that make sex fiery. Insider lines reveal so much, though, and as such your work is awesome! Thanks for releasing this whitegirlunwrapped!
you protect my head
from falling off the bed
That line grabbed me, the way someone else grabbed your hair. It's the little touches, the delicate fingertips barely meeting, even while below the waist everything's cranking at the highest rate of torque. It's tiny considerations that make sex fiery. Insider lines reveal so much, though, and as such your work is awesome! Thanks for releasing this whitegirlunwrapped!
