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Closing Time
A perfect confluence of events
The error of mistaken identity
A confident assertion of faces formed
But voices misheard on the page
The soldier of fortune sidesteps
And his brilliant femme fatale slips by
Both skillfully eluding analysis and capture
But it's a pleasure to watch them dance
Casting sidelong glances
Their eyes barely visible through the smoke
Still a loving couple
Thriving despite the decibels
Carrying the latest in concealed weaponry
Still on the floor at closing time
Pressing together in a slow one
They've seen better, seen worse
Just one thing's for certain
Their drinks are on the house
A nightcap before the midnight train
Non-stop to the best digs honey can buy.
The error of mistaken identity
A confident assertion of faces formed
But voices misheard on the page
The soldier of fortune sidesteps
And his brilliant femme fatale slips by
Both skillfully eluding analysis and capture
But it's a pleasure to watch them dance
Casting sidelong glances
Their eyes barely visible through the smoke
Still a loving couple
Thriving despite the decibels
Carrying the latest in concealed weaponry
Still on the floor at closing time
Pressing together in a slow one
They've seen better, seen worse
Just one thing's for certain
Their drinks are on the house
A nightcap before the midnight train
Non-stop to the best digs honey can buy.
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Re: Closing Time
17th Mar 2015 4:31pm
"Carrying the latest in concealed weaponry"
a metaphor for enduring love or the way to it?
Mind expanding read, Crowfly.
a metaphor for enduring love or the way to it?
Mind expanding read, Crowfly.
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re: Re: Closing Time
17th Mar 2015 4:40pm
I would say both, and a secret strength they share. Anyone who thinks they're lightweights should head for the door.
Re: Closing Time
17th Mar 2015 7:45pm
what a couple to the death WE RIDE OR DIE!!!
(((((((((((((((Crow)))))))))))))))))
Love this!!!
Zazzles xoxxoxox
Wicked Good !!!
(((((((((((((((Crow)))))))))))))))))
Love this!!!
Zazzles xoxxoxox
Wicked Good !!!
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re: Re: Closing Time
17th Mar 2015 8:42pm
Thank you Jackie. You caught the toughness of the couple involved. This one might not make much sense, which is on me.
Re: Closing Time
Anonymous
17th Mar 2015 8:44pm
i want to hear more about this couple. they seem tough as nails.

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re: Re: Closing Time
17th Mar 2015 8:49pm
Re: Closing Time
18th Mar 2015 2:05am
feel the intrigue in this. a little dancing before the next big gamble...
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re: Re: Closing Time
18th Mar 2015 2:04pm
Re: Closing Time
22nd Mar 2015 9:33am
Tumbling Dice is on my daily playlist. Secret communications are the steamiest! Good release crowfly!
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re: Re: Closing Time
24th Mar 2015 9:50pm
Re: Closing Time
24th Mar 2015 8:36am
i love leafing through the subtle layers of your thoughts, crowfly. this was brilliant
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Re: Closing Time
24th Mar 2015 9:51pm
Re. Closing Time
2nd May 2017 2:36pm
I hear rock music deafening both their senses... eyes talking, body responding.. a struggle that each wants to win yet willing to loose.
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