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Naturally Ordered
We walk a path of sharp dependency
If we keep cutting them out
How many spins around the sun
Before we chain birth to a theatre?
Before your anger strikes this impertinence
Ask yourself first
What shape this world,
Consigned to reproduction
Where success is balanced on the edge of a surgical blade?
In this audacious venture into Women’s Business
Dare we invoke fisticuffs
Between Darwin and God?
Where then lies freedom,
Should forces lay our permanence
In the hands of steel and antiseptic?
If we keep cutting them out
How many spins around the sun
Before we chain birth to a theatre?
Before your anger strikes this impertinence
Ask yourself first
What shape this world,
Consigned to reproduction
Where success is balanced on the edge of a surgical blade?
In this audacious venture into Women’s Business
Dare we invoke fisticuffs
Between Darwin and God?
Where then lies freedom,
Should forces lay our permanence
In the hands of steel and antiseptic?
Published 1st Feb 2015
| Edited 2nd Feb 2015
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1st Feb 2015 11:53am
2nd Feb 2015 9:03am
Anonymous
1st Feb 2015 1:35pm
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2nd Feb 2015 9:07am
Thank you Gabriel - You have made me re-think some of these lines, I have changed the lat word to 'antiseptic' as this a better description of what is used in an operating theatre.
Perhaps 'Perpetuity' would have been a better word than permanence?
You are indeed correct - we are perpetual in the things we create, such as books, internet, statues and art - I was more hinting at our potential reliance on medicine to guarantee procreation and birth
Perhaps 'Perpetuity' would have been a better word than permanence?
You are indeed correct - we are perpetual in the things we create, such as books, internet, statues and art - I was more hinting at our potential reliance on medicine to guarantee procreation and birth
1st Feb 2015 5:40pm
I have never been able to make up my mind completely on the subject of abortion. I personally don't believe in it, but don't feel the government has the right to dictate a woman's choice. Your poem may be addressing recourse to medical procedures as too easy an option for various reasons. I believe this to be true. I have placed myself in the hands of a surgeon and things didn't turn out all that well. This is a really provocative write, Frank, and the more provocation the better. Well done.
2nd Feb 2015 9:10am
You and I have touched on the issue of elevated medicine and its inherent flaws. This piece was spawned from a comment by my partner who is a midwife... pertaining to Cesarean sections and our growing dependency on this procedure for our existence.
Anonymous
1st Feb 2015 5:48pm
Natural birth should always be the first choice, in my opinion. But I am completely grateful for the medical intervention of a c-section. Without which, neither I nor my youngest would be here.
Very provocative write, franko.
Very provocative write, franko.
I know you do not
take your blessings for granted.
Glad not to be shot!
Yes I felt like I was putting my head on a chopping block when I hit 'submit'. You are the only woman to have commented thus far Minerva!
take your blessings for granted.
Glad not to be shot!
Yes I felt like I was putting my head on a chopping block when I hit 'submit'. You are the only woman to have commented thus far Minerva!
