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The moon - Senryu
If you were the moon
I danced and swirled in your shine
Just to make you smile
I danced and swirled in your shine
Just to make you smile
Published 11th Dec 2014
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Anonymous
11th Dec 2014 9:18pm
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11th Dec 2014 9:31pm
11th Dec 2014 10:03pm
11th Dec 2014 11:12pm
Shakespearian haiku? That'd be something :-). We should perhaps think about that, sodium589! Thank you so much for the RL entry! Glad about it!
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12th Dec 2014 1:33am
12th Dec 2014 1:07pm
That's too kind to say so, Paul, and I appreciate your warm words much! Thank you :-)!
12th Dec 2014 5:03am
12th Dec 2014 1:09pm
Thank you, John, maybe the lightness of the heart leaks through those lines :-).
Anonymous
12th Dec 2014 8:06am
Surely inviting...you made me smile...
12th Dec 2014 1:10pm
It is a good feeling to make you smile, Faye. I'd be happy if you joined the dance!
12th Dec 2014 8:21am
12th Dec 2014 1:13pm
Feeling honored by your kind words, forever_young, I'd like to deeply thank you for them :-).
12th Dec 2014 4:48pm
12th Dec 2014 5:13pm
12th Dec 2014 8:31pm
Beautiful...love the moon and the images you have brought with it...dance away!😊
12th Dec 2014 8:48pm
Happy you love it and glad the haiku provides you with upbeat images :-), dear JeJe!
12th Dec 2014 10:14pm
12th Dec 2014 10:17pm
13th Dec 2014 1:12pm
Aaaaawwww this is sooooooo
sweet it's sigh inducing! :) very nicely done
my dear! :)
sweet it's sigh inducing! :) very nicely done
my dear! :)
13th Dec 2014 4:28pm
Thank you so much, my dear Poe! Coming from you it means a lot to me! Seems that I'm a little bit softened at the moment :-).
14th Dec 2014 6:43am
15th Dec 2014 8:10am
14th Dec 2014 8:28pm
And you, my dear poet,
if you were to leave me behind,
the moon rocks would cry.
love the moonshine :)
if you were to leave me behind,
the moon rocks would cry.
love the moonshine :)
15th Dec 2014 8:12am
21st Dec 2014 6:23pm
25th Dec 2014 4:12pm
You make me happy with your
lovely comment! Writing our poems,
we aim to touch our readers.
As you do not accept comments on your poems,
let me tell you here and now that
your poems alays touch my heart.
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lovely comment! Writing our poems,
we aim to touch our readers.
As you do not accept comments on your poems,
let me tell you here and now that
your poems alays touch my heart.
X
21st Mar 2015 6:05pm
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