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russian rullet is the key to everything....................
im alone in a crowded room standing up and holding guns.
staring at eachother soo many innocent faces knowing we all did something to make us guilty....
while in a dark room nothing but the light that shoots out of the guns in our hands we cry to see who shall be the last alive and fine....
desparate to find our way to the gun we blow up into broken hearts and blood.
while the people who died are gone and and the floor the only person that made it through alive has to suffer seeing his heart broken many times.
when you are in that situation some of us hope to get shot becuase we are sick of living and seeing us broken and in shame crying to end our lives in a fast way......so i play russian rullet...................
staring at eachother soo many innocent faces knowing we all did something to make us guilty....
while in a dark room nothing but the light that shoots out of the guns in our hands we cry to see who shall be the last alive and fine....
desparate to find our way to the gun we blow up into broken hearts and blood.
while the people who died are gone and and the floor the only person that made it through alive has to suffer seeing his heart broken many times.
when you are in that situation some of us hope to get shot becuase we are sick of living and seeing us broken and in shame crying to end our lives in a fast way......so i play russian rullet...................
Published 25th Apr 2011
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26th Apr 2011 2:20am
Typos: roulette, desperate, "died and gone and on the floor."
I like the idea behind the Russian Roulette metaphor, and the pertinence it has for love. The one thing I will say is that it could use more structure (maybe put it into a more traditional lined format). In addition, this piece could use more mature wording; for example, "crying to end our lives in a fast way" could be "crying out for a quick end," or "explode" instead of "blow up." Overall I like this piece as a first draft, and it could use some polishing.
I like the idea behind the Russian Roulette metaphor, and the pertinence it has for love. The one thing I will say is that it could use more structure (maybe put it into a more traditional lined format). In addition, this piece could use more mature wording; for example, "crying to end our lives in a fast way" could be "crying out for a quick end," or "explode" instead of "blow up." Overall I like this piece as a first draft, and it could use some polishing.
