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Vulnerability
You asked me to stand
Wanted the full view
I turned around for you
Then I heard you say
"Don't move baby girl.
I want to see how they hang."
A bit shy
As I stood there bare
So vulnerable and nervous
Through the shadows you spoke
" Perfection my Angel"
As I tried to dispute
You placed a single finger to my lips
Feeling me tremble at your touch
You looked deep in my eyes and said
'Of course they're perfect....it's you."
Wanted the full view
I turned around for you
Then I heard you say
"Don't move baby girl.
I want to see how they hang."
A bit shy
As I stood there bare
So vulnerable and nervous
Through the shadows you spoke
" Perfection my Angel"
As I tried to dispute
You placed a single finger to my lips
Feeling me tremble at your touch
You looked deep in my eyes and said
'Of course they're perfect....it's you."
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Re: Vulnerability
12th Nov 2014 7:56pm
Amen! I'm glad you grasp the perfection that is you. Beautiful piece LSB. I love the mystery of a line like "Don't move baby girl.
I want to see how they hang."
I want to see how they hang."
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re: Re: Vulnerability
13th Nov 2014 2:20pm
Honestly GW its still a work in progress....
Embracing ALL of myself
Glad u liked it darlin
Thanx so much
Embracing ALL of myself
Glad u liked it darlin
Thanx so much
Re: Vulnerability
12th Nov 2014 8:08pm
this is a classic way to define vulnerability!
nude with breasts hanging free? Mmmmm
Yummy imagery! lol
nude with breasts hanging free? Mmmmm
Yummy imagery! lol
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re: Re: Vulnerability
13th Nov 2014 3:16pm
To me showing our vulnerabilities is the ultimate form of trust.
So happy u liked it PM
So happy u liked it PM
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12th Nov 2014 8:55pm
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13th Nov 2014 3:17pm
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12th Nov 2014 9:29pm
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13th Nov 2014 3:21pm
Re: Vulnerability
Echo the last three commentators. Rhyming comment:
When a man loves a woman through and through
He can say "Of course they're perfect; it's you."
I sense the reverential air
With which he beholds her body bare.
Men, do not hurry to get inside;
Take time to see, and praise, the outside.
A tender loving piece.
Like the pic. Could symbolise how he sees her - on a pedestal but not unattainable, note position of her foot. This could be Eve.
My biblical namesake probably thought the same as the male narrator of the poem. In Song of Songs Chapter 7 he writes in the Lover's voice "Your breasts are like two fawns, twins of a gazelle...Your stature is like that of the palm, and your breasts like clusters of fruit. I said 'I will climb the palm tree and take hold of its fruit. May your breasts be like the clusters of the vine.." Clearly Lover was profoundly pleased by the way the Beloved's hung!
An easily 'reversible' poem - just change 'girl' for 'boy' and this could be written by a woman about a man and his anatomy LOL.
When a man loves a woman through and through
He can say "Of course they're perfect; it's you."
I sense the reverential air
With which he beholds her body bare.
Men, do not hurry to get inside;
Take time to see, and praise, the outside.
A tender loving piece.
Like the pic. Could symbolise how he sees her - on a pedestal but not unattainable, note position of her foot. This could be Eve.
My biblical namesake probably thought the same as the male narrator of the poem. In Song of Songs Chapter 7 he writes in the Lover's voice "Your breasts are like two fawns, twins of a gazelle...Your stature is like that of the palm, and your breasts like clusters of fruit. I said 'I will climb the palm tree and take hold of its fruit. May your breasts be like the clusters of the vine.." Clearly Lover was profoundly pleased by the way the Beloved's hung!
An easily 'reversible' poem - just change 'girl' for 'boy' and this could be written by a woman about a man and his anatomy LOL.
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re: Re: Vulnerability
I am so humbled by ur comment
I truly love the words u wrote n reflection of my own.
In regards to the pic ur take on it is spot on. I saw the same thing in it as u
I truly love the words u wrote n reflection of my own.
In regards to the pic ur take on it is spot on. I saw the same thing in it as u
Re: Vulnerability
12th Nov 2014 10:57pm
Perfection is in the eye of the beholder. He undoubtedly has excellent perception Belle. Takes a strong love to stand with all your vulnerabilities in full view. Very nice write.
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re: Re: Vulnerability
13th Nov 2014 3:39pm
It shows true trust n another to open urself up like that.
Glad u liked it so much dear X
Glad u liked it so much dear X
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13th Nov 2014 3:47pm
Re: Vulnerability
13th Nov 2014 00:47am
sweet, Belle. like gazing at a breathing, trembling work of nude art. arousing beauty...
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re: Re: Vulnerability
13th Nov 2014 4:07pm
Ahhhh...Mr Feddeler isn't every woman s work of art in her own special way?
So happy u enjoyed this one hun
So happy u enjoyed this one hun
Re: Vulnerability
13th Nov 2014 1:52am
To be completely exposed
Is enough for me
To see how it hangs
Your desires to be free
Is enough for me
To see how it hangs
Your desires to be free
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re: Re: Vulnerability
13th Nov 2014 4:44pm
Oh AS i love reading ur take on what i have to say
U definitely have a way with words hun
U definitely have a way with words hun
Re: Vulnerability
Anonymous
13th Nov 2014 3:54am
Belle,
Your vulnerability on full view....never looked so sexy!
tornado
Your vulnerability on full view....never looked so sexy!
tornado
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re: Re: Vulnerability
13th Nov 2014 5:01pm
The sexiness is revealed
When two people trust enough
To show their true selves
Glad u liked my lil wite hun
When two people trust enough
To show their true selves
Glad u liked my lil wite hun
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13th Nov 2014 6:00pm
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