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TOURNIQUET
Let it be said that where her feet trod flowers grew
Tell how the spring waters of her rivers met the sea
And how her head shook merrily and fell anew
And her even passing passion made passengers see
Taught deaf to hearing and dumb new words of wonder
Praise and loving kindness her given melody
Shouting out the shutting fears of yesterday
Pulled out from the tearing of a blooded tourniquet
Of wounds waiting for the teared blindness
of broken promises spoken and failures
that fathered All that I won and loved today
For when good is wanted then greatness comes
Tell how the spring waters of her rivers met the sea
And how her head shook merrily and fell anew
And her even passing passion made passengers see
Taught deaf to hearing and dumb new words of wonder
Praise and loving kindness her given melody
Shouting out the shutting fears of yesterday
Pulled out from the tearing of a blooded tourniquet
Of wounds waiting for the teared blindness
of broken promises spoken and failures
that fathered All that I won and loved today
For when good is wanted then greatness comes
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6th Nov 2014 4:35am
miracles bestowed by a goddess, or witch. beauty & drama in the phrasing...
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6th Nov 2014 8:54am
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6th Nov 2014 7:49am
this reminds me of Leanan sídhe in Celtic folklore... all that beauty & inspiration usually comes at a hefty price.
much enjoyed, whale, welcome back.
much enjoyed, whale, welcome back.
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6th Nov 2014 2:02pm
Lovely.
Romantic, sturdy. The language earns itself in its integrity.
All that I won and loved today....mmm, can't wait to have a day when I think this line, thank you for that
Romantic, sturdy. The language earns itself in its integrity.
All that I won and loved today....mmm, can't wait to have a day when I think this line, thank you for that
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7th Nov 2014 00:04am
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Anonymous
6th Nov 2014 3:42pm
Much enjoyed this piece,love the melancholic heart
of it,read it almost as a prayer...
of it,read it almost as a prayer...
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7th Nov 2014 00:06am
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6th Nov 2014 9:29pm
"dumb new words of wonder" A beautiful contrast in this gorgeous piece. Awesome, and I love the last line. Great to see you.
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Sounds like the trek to the summit was well worth it, well, that's the awesome alpine mountain you've painted in my mind, her beauty reaching for the skies and her influence on the world at her feet.
Brilliant piece of writing, the imagery in your lines has inspired me to find my natural beauty this weekend and forget about the world I leave behind. It's great to read your craft again, whale.
Brilliant piece of writing, the imagery in your lines has inspired me to find my natural beauty this weekend and forget about the world I leave behind. It's great to read your craft again, whale.
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7th Nov 2014 2:29am
to suit case puts a smile on my face - cheers mate - words from a true poet:) thanks
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9th Nov 2014 3:51am
"for when good is wanted then greatness comes"
last line was the clincher for me. great write. thanks for sharing
last line was the clincher for me. great write. thanks for sharing
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21st Nov 2014 9:29am
"Let it be said that where her feet trod flowers grew"
I love that visual. It played in my head.
It's good to see a man write about the magical side of a lady, their lady.
Beautiful Whale.
I love that visual. It played in my head.
It's good to see a man write about the magical side of a lady, their lady.
Beautiful Whale.
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