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(Collaboration)
[This is a work that was a collaboration between myself and a poet I coerced here, 2_of_me . He started it with the first stanza and we just alternated from there. Structured accordingly.]
Each successive wave
crashes harder on the rocks below until the tide recedes. I will stand
here at the cliffs edge until it does
I stand patiently
waiting for the crashing waves to erode all this proud stone and look
forward to riding the avalanche all the way down, to be swallowed whole by the starving ocean below.
As the tide
recedes I'm filled with the feeling of freedom as the jagged rocks below
are exposed.
My doom
is impending, patiently awaiting my arrival. At least something in this
existence is certain, something can be counted on, something reliable,
...something of comfort.
I leap
from my foot hold with arms spread wide. I feel the oceans comforting breeze as the cliffs face passes me by.
Wings
would only be a bother now. I'm going someplace of which they can only dream. This one decision is mine and it's the one thing that nothing and no one can take from me. Rejoice while the thunderous sea still hasn't drowned out what's left of these last moments. Whisper and I'll whisper back a loving, bright soliloquy for no weight now could dare hold down what I have set free. Pull me down. Pull me down.
My eyes
are now open as my skull is crushed with pure pleasure. The body follows in tow and I feel every bone break with serenity.
No pain
no rush of adrenaline, just endorphins flooding out into the water
spreading wide and concentric, becoming one with all the rest of the fluids
caught in this wild and tumultuous pulse of the earth herself and her patterns
become more beautiful with my color adding to the dyes of the palette of her
art
simplicity is so sweet.
[More of 2_of_me 's work can be found here: http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poets/2_of_me/ ]
Each successive wave
crashes harder on the rocks below until the tide recedes. I will stand
here at the cliffs edge until it does
I stand patiently
waiting for the crashing waves to erode all this proud stone and look
forward to riding the avalanche all the way down, to be swallowed whole by the starving ocean below.
As the tide
recedes I'm filled with the feeling of freedom as the jagged rocks below
are exposed.
My doom
is impending, patiently awaiting my arrival. At least something in this
existence is certain, something can be counted on, something reliable,
...something of comfort.
I leap
from my foot hold with arms spread wide. I feel the oceans comforting breeze as the cliffs face passes me by.
Wings
would only be a bother now. I'm going someplace of which they can only dream. This one decision is mine and it's the one thing that nothing and no one can take from me. Rejoice while the thunderous sea still hasn't drowned out what's left of these last moments. Whisper and I'll whisper back a loving, bright soliloquy for no weight now could dare hold down what I have set free. Pull me down. Pull me down.
My eyes
are now open as my skull is crushed with pure pleasure. The body follows in tow and I feel every bone break with serenity.
No pain
no rush of adrenaline, just endorphins flooding out into the water
spreading wide and concentric, becoming one with all the rest of the fluids
caught in this wild and tumultuous pulse of the earth herself and her patterns
become more beautiful with my color adding to the dyes of the palette of her
art
simplicity is so sweet.
[More of 2_of_me 's work can be found here: http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poets/2_of_me/ ]
Published 20th Apr 2011
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Anonymous
20th Apr 2011 7:31pm
This could do with a few hundred line breaks here and there, but is still a terse, romantic lyric poem of suicide and agony, mining familiar territory but doing so in a new and unique way. The description of the narrator striking the earth and then shattering was sublime.
20th Apr 2011 7:53pm
i have to agree with Jack. The description was beautifully horrific.
You two seem to work for each other as the words meld effortlessly
Love
You two seem to work for each other as the words meld effortlessly
Love
20th Apr 2011 11:10pm
We've known each other a long time so we've come to get in each other's brains. He's a friend that I truly treasure.
20th Apr 2011 8:14pm
I like the certainty and assertive tone in the first couple of verses : 'I will stand,' 'is impending,' it mirrors the nature of the tide in that way and creates this kind of unity between it and the narrator. It has this inevitability to it, like then beginning and end weren't separate threads, but steadily entwining and are now coming together. That's what I got from it anyway - good read.
21st Apr 2011 3:01am
it would be hard to guess two ppl wrote this everything about it draws me in peacefull and direct flows... really just speaks for itself very very good :)
Knowing your style and pieces of you both, I could pick between the lines to find you. It is a beautiful dance from one mind to the other.
1st May 2011 6:11am
