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Whats Needed

he loves it when my eyes roll back
as he chokes me out
him unable to stop
till I'm about to pass out
but have no doubts
cause its all about
the sadistic need to please
cause he wants to keep me
make me need it
getting a chance to hit
not afraid to leave a bit
on my compliant pale body
so lush and ready for attack
but i always give this treatment back

(( this was a bad poem ._. but ..... ))

Written by RosieTheGothicKat

Published 22nd Oct 2014

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Re: Whats Needed

lolweirdgirl (MirandaS.)

22nd Oct 2014 2:29pm

I thought it was a good poem... I've round having a steady rhyme helps me keep a rhythm... in the first three likes maybe change stop to something else the help the flow? I do like the writing as a whole though :)