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Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
The myth isn’t all it’s cracked up to be,
This mystery is deadly.
The story you hear is the life I lead,
These words are no joke.
I was all in before the cards got dealt.
I didn’t choose this shit,
I got chosen.
Rotten genes and terrible memories,
I was born struggling.
The first hit was it,
I was hooked before it even kicked in.
This mystery is deadly.
The story you hear is the life I lead,
These words are no joke.
I was all in before the cards got dealt.
I didn’t choose this shit,
I got chosen.
Rotten genes and terrible memories,
I was born struggling.
The first hit was it,
I was hooked before it even kicked in.
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Re: Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
14th Oct 2014 1:42am
This was the first poem I was ever proud to of written and I ran across it earlier today. I thought it would be interesting to see what people that have seen my work a year and a half later thought about it. Hope its enjoyable!
Re: Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
14th Oct 2014 4:02am
it's good. being 'all in' & 'hooked': you were primed & avidly drawn to ruin...
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re: Re: Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
14th Oct 2014 12:06pm
Re: Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
14th Oct 2014 4:21am
"The myth isn’t all it’s cracked up to be"
This is exactly real and exactly poetry. I enjoy everything you write, as always.
This is exactly real and exactly poetry. I enjoy everything you write, as always.
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Re: Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
14th Oct 2014 7:21am
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Re: Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
Your words AH....tell it as it is for you...
You don't use them as an excuse....you don't hide behind them....
Yeah, you got chosen so what are doing about it?
You're educating us mate through your poems...you take us along with you to better understand what we'll never experience .... You're the teacher, I'm the student ... Your writing is the silver lining in what is your life of conflict &'pain ... Never stop... Writing :)
You don't use them as an excuse....you don't hide behind them....
Yeah, you got chosen so what are doing about it?
You're educating us mate through your poems...you take us along with you to better understand what we'll never experience .... You're the teacher, I'm the student ... Your writing is the silver lining in what is your life of conflict &'pain ... Never stop... Writing :)
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re: Re: Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
14th Oct 2014 12:31pm
Wow, I can truly say that is the nicest thing anyone has ever said about my work! I'm always happy to hear your sugestions and corrections becouse they
tend to do me a lot of good. All and all, I'm just glad to have you in the mix :)
tend to do me a lot of good. All and all, I'm just glad to have you in the mix :)
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15th Oct 2014 7:46am
Re: Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
24th Oct 2014 1:14pm
Ah, this is quite I feel, too, and perhaps that's why I'm back in DU... Thank you for sharing, sir. :)
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re: Re: Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
31st Oct 2014 10:02am
Thank you for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed!
And I'm glad I could aid in your return to D.U.!
And I'm glad I could aid in your return to D.U.!
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5th Nov 2014 1:47pm
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Re. Excuse My Mood (one of my first poems)
24th Dec 2019 1:18am
You did a great job with this one... Short but expressive. Keep up the writing, Anthony!
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24th Dec 2019 3:36am