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Your Choice
I have the gift
running incessantly
through my veins
Your part of the story,
to the blade
Can't raise the dead,
of the feeble fool
Tenth spirituality
is the gift of
Good-bye
running incessantly
through my veins
Your part of the story,
to the blade
Can't raise the dead,
of the feeble fool
Tenth spirituality
is the gift of
Good-bye
Published 9th Sep 2014
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9th Sep 2014 8:28pm
it hits me as surreal poetry. choice is a bitter crossroad, especially the choice of leaving or staying...
10th Sep 2014 1:53pm
I owe you a drink John. Hope you like Whiskey ; )
I read somewhere there is a 9th spiritual gift...The gift of Good-bye. Some say it just means their part of the story in your life finished.
I found that fascinating and thought about moments where a choice had to be made.
Thank you!
I read somewhere there is a 9th spiritual gift...The gift of Good-bye. Some say it just means their part of the story in your life finished.
I found that fascinating and thought about moments where a choice had to be made.
Thank you!
10th Sep 2014 11:26pm
Oh YES!!! I know this well. Just said goodbye to a very close friend of mine. I couldn't get past the hurt this time. I'm sorry for your sadness. Sending luv, hugs and prayers your way Sweet Beautiful Soul! Xo :)
12th Sep 2014 12:14pm
No doubt that if it were meant to be, we would have continued on this journey together.
It just wasn't intended for my life, but I have plans and so much ahead of me. I won't be sad, just accept that part will be different ; )
I always love your hugs sweetness!
Thank you
It just wasn't intended for my life, but I have plans and so much ahead of me. I won't be sad, just accept that part will be different ; )
I always love your hugs sweetness!
Thank you
11th Sep 2014 10:31pm
12th Sep 2014 12:15pm
15th Sep 2014 2:43am
well, i think the commas are unneccessary, but that's perhaps personal choice. i'm actually not sure whether the "Your" in the second stanza should be "Your" or "You're" here, but otherwise, i love it.
15th Sep 2014 2:54am
Thank you Patrick Birdener for reading and commenting!
Yes, I meant to write "your" in the second stanza.
Glad you liked it!
Yes, I meant to write "your" in the second stanza.
Glad you liked it!
16th Oct 2014 2:58pm
17th Oct 2014 00:38am
This is an incredible honor to have you visit my Queen.
Thank you so much!
Thank you so much!
Anonymous
31st Oct 2014 3:27am
Loved this.. Brilliant work..
Dave
Dave
31st Oct 2014 4:06am
29th Nov 2014 2:37am
Hola, Sra. Lena.
Felicitaciones por una excelente pieza de la escritura. Muchas veces no vemos la décima, hasta el último momento se nos viene encima.
Excepcional!
Saludo a usted.
Felicitaciones por una excelente pieza de la escritura. Muchas veces no vemos la décima, hasta el último momento se nos viene encima.
Excepcional!
Saludo a usted.
Sr VP....Que alegria!
Gracias por leer y comentar, me alegro de verte otra vez ; )
Gracias por leer y comentar, me alegro de verte otra vez ; )
23rd Nov 2015 3:08pm
I'm loving this one for my inner
accord,which truly made me
think heavy about some things..
hmm.. wow..
accord,which truly made me
think heavy about some things..
hmm.. wow..
23rd Nov 2015 4:20pm
Your comments are truly appreciated Ms. Howling.
The fact that this piece made you think, made me more
proud of it for so many reasons ; )
The fact that this piece made you think, made me more
proud of it for so many reasons ; )
