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blues for a lonely night
slow death in a pretty bottle
the story of my life, written in spilled whiskey
bustin my ass all day for a few bucks
so i can blow it all on crow every night
in a string of broken down saloons
ghosts of foolish dreams hangin on my back,
whispering love stories that never happened
~~~ i drift back, to sensuous tropical nights,
hot Spanish women whose notorious flowers
captured me in the push-pull of that
velvet-sided vice,
the nights that never fade
(storyline of my wettest dreams) ~~~
i sit & write my history on dainty napkins,
the piano raining tearful notes under soft light,
then crumble them up, toss em to the floor
just like that big hand slaps you around
all of your days, then crumbles your soul,
tosses it into hell, casual-like.
& all of the sweet whispers in all of
the dusty poems i hold in my heart
can’t blow away these splendid blues –
the whiskey rocks me, tender as a lover, & just
before the macizo tosses me into the street,
the piano’s melody kisses me goodnight…
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Re: blues for a lonely night
4th Sep 2014 4:08am
This is so beautiful, sir!!! Truly, the piano is one of my weaknesses...and I wish, even just for a night, for a slow death in a pretty bottle(if I interpreted it right), but, oh, I am too young. Breathtaking. :)
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Re: blues for a lonely night
4th Sep 2014 5:21am
Re: blues for a lonely night
4th Sep 2014 6:19am
Paradoxically, Once in awhile your in a tropical Spanish land, dreamin' about a distant and faded dive bar. I'm not sure what is more depressing?
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Re: blues for a lonely night
4th Sep 2014 6:49am
Only you can turn a depressed and lonely night have such a beautiful edge. Well done sir. As always a great piece of work
Hugs
Belle
Hugs
Belle
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Re: blues for a lonely night
4th Sep 2014 11:57am
Re: blues for a lonely night
4th Sep 2014 1:09pm
Re: blues for a lonely night
4th Sep 2014 2:12pm
Beautiful longing loneliness John!!!
Keeping to the back alley ways-makes for A damn good gritty Write-Excellence!!!
Keeping to the back alley ways-makes for A damn good gritty Write-Excellence!!!
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Re: blues for a lonely night
4th Sep 2014 2:45pm
" I drift back, to sensuous tropic nights,
hot Spanish women whose notorious flowers
captured me in the push-pull of that
velvet sided vice,
the nights that never fade
(storyline of my wettest dreams)
Your visuals veer visceral to the sublime in many of your poems John. You paint with words as a true artist.. you remind me of van Gogh imbibing in absinth and creating master pieces in blue.. with a taint of green to quell the fairy. Great poem!
hot Spanish women whose notorious flowers
captured me in the push-pull of that
velvet sided vice,
the nights that never fade
(storyline of my wettest dreams)
Your visuals veer visceral to the sublime in many of your poems John. You paint with words as a true artist.. you remind me of van Gogh imbibing in absinth and creating master pieces in blue.. with a taint of green to quell the fairy. Great poem!
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Re: blues for a lonely night
4th Sep 2014 5:54pm
I love jakehammer's comment. Words are our most vital resource and then there's you, oh my goodness there is you in your garden of verbal bounties, materializing, and nurturing such poetic succulence. It's mine, I bookmarked/plucked it while it's at its peak of ripeness. ..Thank you beyond measure.
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Re: blues for a lonely night
5th Sep 2014 4:01am
JohnFeddeler, luv :-* ~
Each line, each stanza, each phrase is so perfectly crafted, expertly honed, they're like poems in miniature, each one.
You could lift them free and showcase each separately, so radiant are they, so radiantly hardworking as well. (I'll not forget you say that of your poems, that they work hard: blue collar poems, eh, luv? :-*)
I rarely do this, but I, too, feel compelled to agree with jakehammer and then blue_angel as well in that, "Your visuals veer visceral to the sublime... You paint with words as a true artist" and "oh, my goodness there is you in your garden of verbal bounties, materializing, and nurturing such poetic succulence." ;-*
Each line, each stanza, each phrase is so perfectly crafted, expertly honed, they're like poems in miniature, each one.
You could lift them free and showcase each separately, so radiant are they, so radiantly hardworking as well. (I'll not forget you say that of your poems, that they work hard: blue collar poems, eh, luv? :-*)
I rarely do this, but I, too, feel compelled to agree with jakehammer and then blue_angel as well in that, "Your visuals veer visceral to the sublime... You paint with words as a true artist" and "oh, my goodness there is you in your garden of verbal bounties, materializing, and nurturing such poetic succulence." ;-*
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Re: blues for a lonely night
5th Sep 2014 2:49pm
Re: blues for a lonely night
5th Sep 2014 6:20pm
"ghosts of foolish dreams hangin on my back,
whispering love stories that never happened " oh i loved that line
awe inspiring ink, john..enjoyed as always!!!
whispering love stories that never happened " oh i loved that line
awe inspiring ink, john..enjoyed as always!!!
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Re: blues for a lonely night
6th Sep 2014 8:35am
Re: blues for a lonely night
10th Sep 2014 7:11pm
Re: blues for a lonely night
11th Sep 2014 5:48am
You have done it again what a master piece.
Spelled Whiskey this poem has a lot of symbolism .
Spelled Whiskey this poem has a lot of symbolism .
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