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Ruling Your Senses
I lie here naked
I've groaned, I've mated
I've moaned, I'm sated
Love, how could you be so unwise?
Strolling into my den, alone and unaided
I'll be the mist in your eyes
until your sights have faded
until your breaths have become so heavy you can't take it
How does it feel to be subjugated?
To be down on your knees, so degraded
Your soul and your heart I have invaded
Sirens sing their holy songs in their depths of doom
you kneel in prayers, oh how sacred
This act of submission is
And you still crave it
I've groaned, I've mated
I've moaned, I'm sated
Love, how could you be so unwise?
Strolling into my den, alone and unaided
I'll be the mist in your eyes
until your sights have faded
until your breaths have become so heavy you can't take it
How does it feel to be subjugated?
To be down on your knees, so degraded
Your soul and your heart I have invaded
Sirens sing their holy songs in their depths of doom
you kneel in prayers, oh how sacred
This act of submission is
And you still crave it
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Re: Ruling Your Senses
3rd Sep 2014 8:22am
Re: Ruling Your Senses
3rd Sep 2014 4:55pm
"I'll be the mist in your eyes
until your sights have faded
until your breaths have become so heavy you can't take it
How does it feel to be subjugated? " wonderful well thought out lines here,love how it plays into the title..well done!!!
until your sights have faded
until your breaths have become so heavy you can't take it
How does it feel to be subjugated? " wonderful well thought out lines here,love how it plays into the title..well done!!!
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re: Re: Ruling Your Senses
3rd Sep 2014 5:45pm
Re: Ruling Your Senses
3rd Sep 2014 6:47pm
Re: Ruling Your Senses
3rd Sep 2014 11:29pm
i loved when the sirens broke rhythm that fell back into place... naturally. x
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re: Re: Ruling Your Senses
3rd Sep 2014 11:48pm
Re: Ruling Your Senses
22nd Sep 2014 9:18am
it's a honest observation. It can be so fake or so structured, but a person is just looking for the that hormonal desire to be consummated. I liked the heavy rhythm and the lighting up of it on the next to last line, then returning at the very end to give your last punch of truth. I enjoyed it. Thank you Rosedd13 ;)
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re: Re: Ruling Your Senses
22nd Sep 2014 9:40am
Re: Ruling Your Senses
27th Sep 2014 6:56pm
In a weird creative way well to me it feels like a dominatrix poem it just gives me that vibe Im liking it too
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Re: Ruling Your Senses
18th Oct 2014 5:13pm