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screaming rage
You make me so hazy with rage and pain
I make myself cry and I scream with agony and rage
I know it is not you but can't you see? it's me!
i hate myself but i hate you just a bit more
I make myself cry and I scream with agony and rage
I know it is not you but can't you see? it's me!
i hate myself but i hate you just a bit more
Published 23rd Aug 2014
| Edited 4th Jun 2015
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25th Aug 2014 10:16pm
28th Aug 2014 2:31pm
Don't go pointing your rage towards me--
So I'll get on with writing this:
Blind writing is good--can help get through writers block and run with a story idea--but you must have some sort of structure and control over yourself.
A poem isn't a continuous unbroken sentence, you shouldn't let external or internal anger make you lose yourself.
I can see you wrote this in the moment (which is good if you know how to do it right), but this is ridiculous.
What do you hope to accomplish or achieve by expressing your in-the-moment rage in such a sloppy manner?
This seemed like less then a half attempt, in all due honesty.
So I'll get on with writing this:
Blind writing is good--can help get through writers block and run with a story idea--but you must have some sort of structure and control over yourself.
A poem isn't a continuous unbroken sentence, you shouldn't let external or internal anger make you lose yourself.
I can see you wrote this in the moment (which is good if you know how to do it right), but this is ridiculous.
What do you hope to accomplish or achieve by expressing your in-the-moment rage in such a sloppy manner?
This seemed like less then a half attempt, in all due honesty.
