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Ramblings of a Lonely Person
Life is questions without answers
I'm breaking under the pressure
I'm losing site of the point here
Wondering if anyone really cares
I keep reaching out for something
But in the end I'm gaining nothing
Sometimes I just need a fucking hug
Someone to show me a little love
A little bit of kindness would go far
So I can know who my friends are
I look around feeling lost and empty
Wondering if anyone will help me
Figuring that it's too much to ask
To be more than just someone's past
Flung away like a piece of rubbish
Feeling like I have no substance
Maybe I'm the one to blame for this
Always pushing for others happiness
Self sacrificing and self loathing
Never comfortable in my own clothing
I tear myself apart in my own despair
So tired of thinking life's not fair
I guess only I can find any help
Then maybe I'll start to love myself
Find a way to climb out of this hell
And stop living in this broken shell
Published 17th Aug 2014
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17th Aug 2014 1:31pm
I know this feeling all too well. Expressed about as well as one can express such feelings. JJ hugs {{{{Jenn}}}}
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22nd Aug 2014 7:49pm
If I may...
The rhyming restricts the feeling (that I get anyway). Don't get me wrong, I can relate to a good deal of this. Such as:
"Sometimes I just need a fucking hug
Someone to show me a little love"
"I look around feeling lost and empty
Wondering if anyone will help me"
"Never comfortable in my own clothing
I tear myself apart in my own despair"
In contrast to the rest, I liked the hopefulness of the conclusion.
The rhyming restricts the feeling (that I get anyway). Don't get me wrong, I can relate to a good deal of this. Such as:
"Sometimes I just need a fucking hug
Someone to show me a little love"
"I look around feeling lost and empty
Wondering if anyone will help me"
"Never comfortable in my own clothing
I tear myself apart in my own despair"
In contrast to the rest, I liked the hopefulness of the conclusion.
10th Sep 2014 4:54pm
Thank you. The beginning was written without trying to rhyme lolz it just flew out and the rest was written later and with more concern for rhyme and rhythm to keep the concept in time with the beginning
12th Feb 2018 10:01am
