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Uncertainty
Bloody fists fly
Impacts loud with groans of pain
Two pair non-stop
A prize fight of epic proportions
Anger and spit flying across
The open air like rain
Blood spattered feathers shaking
Reptilian crimson scales clicking
Like nails raking against each other
No weakness in their assault
Determination on their mind
Hatred in their eyes
They hurl themselves
Against each other
Claws raking, ripping flesh open
Immortal lust from the beginning of time
Engrained hatred all encompassing
Spurs them on to win
I stand in awe
Frozen blank stare
Unable to decide
(C) 2014 XMAR82 ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
Impacts loud with groans of pain
Two pair non-stop
A prize fight of epic proportions
Anger and spit flying across
The open air like rain
Blood spattered feathers shaking
Reptilian crimson scales clicking
Like nails raking against each other
No weakness in their assault
Determination on their mind
Hatred in their eyes
They hurl themselves
Against each other
Claws raking, ripping flesh open
Immortal lust from the beginning of time
Engrained hatred all encompassing
Spurs them on to win
I stand in awe
Frozen blank stare
Unable to decide
(C) 2014 XMAR82 ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
Published 14th Aug 2014
| Edited 3rd Feb 2017
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14th Aug 2014 11:40pm
Ok I am so sure I am very wrong about this not many people see the way I do, but xmar82 This makes me vision a kick ass sex scene. I want to be the star female in this fight.
I am in love with this fight♥
I am in love with this fight♥
15th Aug 2014 7:00pm
Well it's a fight between my angel and my little devil. I can't decide so they keep on fighting. That would be a wicked twist though.
I'm uncertain. It is a fight but what kind of fight? For me it has no sexual but an emotional background. Two lovers which fight to free themselves from each other, their last (perhaps) struggles before they're finally done. I read your poem several times, it touches me deeply.
15th Aug 2014 7:01pm
15th Aug 2014 2:20am
very good description xmar....
felt i was present for the fight...
now to me i first thought it was a prize fight between boxers but then....
i feel its between a bird of prey and a rather large lizard...
could picture a hawk or something similar and the large monitor lizards we get over here....
whatever was your inspiration you've done what good writers do...
allowed the reader to interpret as they will....excellent...
felt i was present for the fight...
now to me i first thought it was a prize fight between boxers but then....
i feel its between a bird of prey and a rather large lizard...
could picture a hawk or something similar and the large monitor lizards we get over here....
whatever was your inspiration you've done what good writers do...
allowed the reader to interpret as they will....excellent...
15th Aug 2014 7:02pm
It's the little angel and the little devil on my shoulders who are fighting trying to sway my decision.
15th Aug 2014 10:26pm
xmar....
the way you describe them is not little....
what a battle you've got going there...
hope its not a regular thing...... :)
the way you describe them is not little....
what a battle you've got going there...
hope its not a regular thing...... :)
26th Aug 2014 10:46pm
Anonymous
15th Aug 2014 2:32am
"A prize fight of epic proportions"
Enough said.
Excellently penned, XMar. xo, Devlin.
Enough said.
Excellently penned, XMar. xo, Devlin.
15th Aug 2014 7:03pm
15th Aug 2014 3:36am
X dear friend i see it as a fight with inner turmoil. Ones own struggle with their doubts n fears.
Excellent n descriptive write.
Xoxoxo
Belle
Excellent n descriptive write.
Xoxoxo
Belle
15th Aug 2014 7:05pm
Yes inner turmoil. The struggle with good and evil. My decision delays and the fight continues. Good read Belle.
15th Aug 2014 9:23pm
Goes to show i pay close attention to everything u say dear friend. Plus as u know we r alot alike
15th Aug 2014 4:10am
15th Aug 2014 7:07pm
Anonymous
15th Aug 2014 7:08am
Somehow I kept on thinking of birds of prey soaring down, on their mission of the hunt.....
The tensity is felt here....
The tensity is felt here....
15th Aug 2014 7:06pm
16th Aug 2014 4:25pm
Muscular and uncompromising - the viewer dispassionate - great write on the only debate - the fact u wrote it puts my money on our feathered friend
Maybe a typo in the title
Maybe a typo in the title
18th Aug 2014 8:58pm
17th Aug 2014 2:00pm
18th Aug 2014 8:59pm
Anonymous
19th Aug 2014 4:32am
Sad but great poem. Like it! :)
19th Aug 2014 5:59pm
MAR!
Wow this piece is so fast!
Jeesh, yes what a cross between,
how ever will you decide?
Good luck with dat'
wonderfully crisp, I found this piece original
Thanks for sharing your intimate thoughts!
Always
Broomie Xxxx
Wow this piece is so fast!
Jeesh, yes what a cross between,
how ever will you decide?
Good luck with dat'
wonderfully crisp, I found this piece original
Thanks for sharing your intimate thoughts!
Always
Broomie Xxxx
25th Aug 2014 10:54pm
I wanted it to be fast paced just like my decision. Quick and relatively painless.
26th Aug 2014 1:33am
