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A Gasp in Time
it was a stop in a minute
designated randomly by time
a pause, like a slowed clock
the heart skipped a little
witnessing a perfection
in that small tick
it was a gasp
a little stumble
a slow growing ripple
and a euphoria
starting from the centre
encompassing the surrounding space
a writing on the wall
a graffiti, etched there
adorning a pulse
that would go on for a while
adoring that perfection
an honesty in the words
I love You.
designated randomly by time
a pause, like a slowed clock
the heart skipped a little
witnessing a perfection
in that small tick
it was a gasp
a little stumble
a slow growing ripple
and a euphoria
starting from the centre
encompassing the surrounding space
a writing on the wall
a graffiti, etched there
adorning a pulse
that would go on for a while
adoring that perfection
an honesty in the words
I love You.
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Re: A Gasp in Time
1st Aug 2014 4:31pm
It's a breath of fresh air sometimes to pause once in a while from our daily grind and take a look around the beauty around us...and listen to the loving words in all its honesty!
Good read, Grace.
@EngrVV
Good read, Grace.
@EngrVV
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re: Re: A Gasp in Time
1st Aug 2014 4:44pm
Thanks so much EngrVV, yes it is refreshing to stop a while and enjoy nature at its best, and in that moment to love all. :)
Re: A Gasp in Time
2nd Aug 2014 5:58am
Pausing... Letting time slow down... Absorbing the beauty that we often overlook or take for granted
Deep and beautiful... much admiration for this piece
Deep and beautiful... much admiration for this piece
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2nd Aug 2014 12:23pm
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2nd Aug 2014 7:41pm
re: Re: A Gasp in Time
3rd Aug 2014 00:30am
Oh indeed Hashman...its that perfect moment that won't ever be repeated again. Thanks for reading me.:)
Re: A Gasp in Time
Anonymous
3rd Aug 2014 1:56am
I love how in reality the poem is just "a gasp in time" but you extended that gasp and I thorougly enjoyed the third stanza. The enjambment reflect the gasping, well done my friend.
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re: Re: A Gasp in Time
3rd Aug 2014 2:04am
Thank you so much for reading me sw9618. It is a gasp...and in that second, a perfection.:)
Re: A Gasp in Time
3rd Aug 2014 2:52am
Truths...in these times of today its so shocking when the simplicity of a truth can be perceived and interpreted simply as.
It takes You through the euphoria of actual realization ....one that at first the skeptic reads as blurred becomes crystal -and there is the magic we seek to Life!!!
Beautiful Gasp Dear Grace-Simplicity made grand by all its many layers.
It takes You through the euphoria of actual realization ....one that at first the skeptic reads as blurred becomes crystal -and there is the magic we seek to Life!!!
Beautiful Gasp Dear Grace-Simplicity made grand by all its many layers.
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3rd Aug 2014 2:57am
Re: A Gasp in Time
4th Aug 2014 3:52am
I agree with Bro. SOUL this is a Great write!!
Love the read GRACE!!!
INK ON Sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
Love the read GRACE!!!
INK ON Sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
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4th Aug 2014 5:48am
Re: A Gasp in Time
1st Sep 2014 6:00pm
Fantastic write! It actually made me hold my breath while I read it. Your discription of a moment was awesome!
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1st Sep 2014 6:18pm