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underwater love
You cry’d so much it flooded our world
and washed away much of your soul
most valued traits evaporated
leaving us so lo, were high and dry
drowning in a salty sea
choking on tears of self pity
and all I can do, Is throw you a line
or two, and hopefully pull you back in Time.
Published 27th Oct 2009
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26th Jul 2011 5:05pm
this is quite expressive,but you should paint a more vivid picture! Don't give it up!!
26th Jul 2011 5:55pm
Not exactly related but I couldn't help but think of this song since it shares the same title:
http://tinysong.com/HSFL
The song is actually a nice backdrop for your poem. I agree with the previous comment that I think maybe you can dig a little deeper and squeeze a little more out of this poem.
http://tinysong.com/HSFL
The song is actually a nice backdrop for your poem. I agree with the previous comment that I think maybe you can dig a little deeper and squeeze a little more out of this poem.
