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Ashes
She was my weakness
I lost my heart to her
She set me on fire
And danced as my ashes fell
The night wind blew
Through my fair maidens hair
And what was left of me
Floated in the moon lit air
I lost my heart to her
She set me on fire
And danced as my ashes fell
The night wind blew
Through my fair maidens hair
And what was left of me
Floated in the moon lit air
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Re: Ashes
30th Jul 2014 5:25am
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30th Jul 2014 5:58am
This is poignant and starkly beautiful, Tommie Lynn, luv :-*. Your words evoke thoughts for me of ancient myths and fantastical sword dancers set in farflung otherworlds.
As well, they conjure images of heart-wrenching loss and lovers pulled apart unfairly. You are a poet of such incredible depth and breadth. Thank you for sharing yet again, luv. :-*
As well, they conjure images of heart-wrenching loss and lovers pulled apart unfairly. You are a poet of such incredible depth and breadth. Thank you for sharing yet again, luv. :-*
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30th Jul 2014 11:47am
So happy you see that Savaja.
As always, I appreciate your words, deeply.
Thank you :)
As always, I appreciate your words, deeply.
Thank you :)
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30th Jul 2014 11:48am
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30th Jul 2014 1:40pm
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30th Jul 2014 9:30pm
Funny I wrote a drunken message like this a few nights back ... but it was more like "if I crash my bike and die on the highway tonight - it's your fault" ...
Fortunately your scribe is much prettier and more everlasting.
P.S. I slept on my bike ... Had coffee and eggs before riding home. -she thought it all hilarious
Fortunately your scribe is much prettier and more everlasting.
P.S. I slept on my bike ... Had coffee and eggs before riding home. -she thought it all hilarious
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31st Jul 2014 00:03am
Now that's funny LSP ;)
Sounds like you have a great woman!
Thank you very much for your story...made me laugh. :)
Sounds like you have a great woman!
Thank you very much for your story...made me laugh. :)
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30th Jul 2014 10:14pm
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