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LETHE
Born on this Earth a sentient soul, happy and free.
Not spiteful or jealous or indentured or mean,
Not some guarantee or docket that certifies I’m me.
Whole, wholly undivided, for this part, for this role
Undiminished as Sun by either dark clouds or night.
This flesh has an ether memory of far clouds, rain,
Of a fall into Lethe with but a few beads of belief
To remember by, remember by, so that all may rise.
Each plexus, a gyre, vortex, a gear, lifting upwards
Like the chain of twenty-nine locks on Devizes canal.
Unknown, un-owned, a beat of ripples repeating, regrown,
Ever expanding, a lotus heart, a sun lit focus, light tipped
As Ashoka’s crown, heaven sent yet fleeting, evanescent
As a bubble, a beauty, as wrinkles on wizened skin or
Wisdom distilled from steam, in this dream of a stream.
Not spiteful or jealous or indentured or mean,
Not some guarantee or docket that certifies I’m me.
Whole, wholly undivided, for this part, for this role
Undiminished as Sun by either dark clouds or night.
This flesh has an ether memory of far clouds, rain,
Of a fall into Lethe with but a few beads of belief
To remember by, remember by, so that all may rise.
Each plexus, a gyre, vortex, a gear, lifting upwards
Like the chain of twenty-nine locks on Devizes canal.
Unknown, un-owned, a beat of ripples repeating, regrown,
Ever expanding, a lotus heart, a sun lit focus, light tipped
As Ashoka’s crown, heaven sent yet fleeting, evanescent
As a bubble, a beauty, as wrinkles on wizened skin or
Wisdom distilled from steam, in this dream of a stream.
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Re: LETHE
Anonymous
19th Jul 2014 10:37pm
Greetings, Whale. . .what can I possibly say about this piece that is, and what I, consider as uplifting and motivational. I enjoyed the various wordplay interwoven within the versus. . ."Unknown, un-owned", "distilled from steam, dream of a stream". . .clever. Devlin.
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19th Jul 2014 11:00pm
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19th Jul 2014 11:28pm
A picture painted with your perfect words♥ of intricate and unraveling beauty of my love, mother Earth ♥
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20th Jul 2014 1:39am
Re: LETHE
20th Jul 2014 00:13am
my Greek mythology is slight,
but wasn't Lethe the river of
forgetfulness and oblivion..?
I think this poem shall not sail
down it..:)
really well done...
but wasn't Lethe the river of
forgetfulness and oblivion..?
I think this poem shall not sail
down it..:)
really well done...
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20th Jul 2014 1:45am
Cheers mate - that's right it's the place where we forget who we are - big thanks for the support
Re: LETHE
20th Jul 2014 2:48am
free & anonymous, not registered or notarized. sailing joyfully down the river of your life, & riding out the ripples...
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20th Jul 2014 10:37am
Thanks John - cool comment - sometimes it seems like we are just travellers passing through
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Anonymous
20th Jul 2014 3:01am
If only it can be as easy as that, but memory has a way of crawling out under cracks.
Wonderful play and underplay of word usage, without making it seem cluttered with good flow. As i was reading the 1L in S3, i thought i read 'bead' but ofcourse it's beat, and then i thought after finishing the whole stanza i liked my error in reading as bead..ah another version of the poem re-grew in my mind.
Nice work Whale.
Wonderful play and underplay of word usage, without making it seem cluttered with good flow. As i was reading the 1L in S3, i thought i read 'bead' but ofcourse it's beat, and then i thought after finishing the whole stanza i liked my error in reading as bead..ah another version of the poem re-grew in my mind.
Nice work Whale.
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20th Jul 2014 10:40am
Ha ha :) yes I re-read it like this and am not sure whether your sub-conscious amendment of it might be better! I'll leave it as it is for now and think on it
Re: LETHE
20th Jul 2014 4:10am
I was just reading a few days ago about 'the right to be forgotten.' Your poem reminded me of it. Greetings, whale, it is good to read you again.
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20th Jul 2014 10:44am
Hi Absinthe also enjoying the journey of your work - sometimes it's nice to be forgotten, or forget but there is a feeling of dissatisfaction with these (I know - I've tried them both) - the question repeats why are we here
Re: LETHE
20th Jul 2014 6:58am
"As Ashoka’s crown, heaven sent yet
fleeting, evanescent
As a bubble, a beauty, as wrinkles on
wizened skin or
Wisdom distilled from steam, in this
dream of a stream."
whale, you've got to do a reading someday, this piece was made to be read aloud, the word play just begs for it.
loved this
fleeting, evanescent
As a bubble, a beauty, as wrinkles on
wizened skin or
Wisdom distilled from steam, in this
dream of a stream."
whale, you've got to do a reading someday, this piece was made to be read aloud, the word play just begs for it.
loved this
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Hey shadoe will think about this - very kind words - really pleased it made your reading list!
Re: LETHE
20th Jul 2014 7:12pm
Time will help us forget our past by fading the memories. Intriguing write Whale, much meaning in it. Enjoyed.
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21st Jul 2014 2:53pm
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Anonymous
20th Jul 2014 7:31pm
Congratulations on becoming a ninja of imagery...so vivid, and supported by well thought out diction, cool ink indeed.
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Anonymous
21st Jul 2014 1:09am
Oh Whale.....what can I say about this breathless write.....(sigh). Beautiful uplifting lines all the way thru. I agree with "winter" on this. I can imagine the wind whispering this one. Enjoyed much. RL for me. Xo :)
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Very much appreciated comment Flowergirl - wind in the words :) - and smiling about the add to your list
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21st Jul 2014 6:14am
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21st Jul 2014 3:07pm
Thanks PS - yes I liked the ambiguity of the use of the word Ether - meaning an anaesthetic or uppermost sky
Re: LETHE
23rd Jul 2014 7:49pm
. . .And as down through the ages of mankind--each generation following the next in a perfect, pre-ordained plan...yet, the legendary, un-solved mystery remains: what is the purpose of our existence?
My friend, your unique, vivid imagery, and cleverly crafted word-play, combine to create a very compelling piece--to be sure!
My friend, your unique, vivid imagery, and cleverly crafted word-play, combine to create a very compelling piece--to be sure!
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24th Jul 2014 10:27am
Ah my enchanted one - I enjoy your insight deeply - the mystery is the lotus seed in the swamp