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What has become of me?
Since you've been gone I've become you. caught up in these drugs and lies. Hell now i think of suicide.
Cut me, kick me, kill me, i'm still numb i'm like a child crying casted out, neglected. i want the hand of my best friend i look into my eyes and see how hollow i am. It seems pretty fly to die...imma get away with murder. My life is the valley of death. I'll blow my mind away with this .45 in my hand. I think about it day and night hoping one day..just one day. I'll pray on my knees maybe god will hear me. My life is not normal. I'm 21 never will I see to be me. Minute after minute im dying. BOOM! I'm gone. Let my body hit the floor one hot of this damn I wish.... My suicide. Everything everyone thought I would be is falling aprat in front of them. I know I failed. but I know i'm just like someone else.
Cut me, kick me, kill me, i'm still numb i'm like a child crying casted out, neglected. i want the hand of my best friend i look into my eyes and see how hollow i am. It seems pretty fly to die...imma get away with murder. My life is the valley of death. I'll blow my mind away with this .45 in my hand. I think about it day and night hoping one day..just one day. I'll pray on my knees maybe god will hear me. My life is not normal. I'm 21 never will I see to be me. Minute after minute im dying. BOOM! I'm gone. Let my body hit the floor one hot of this damn I wish.... My suicide. Everything everyone thought I would be is falling aprat in front of them. I know I failed. but I know i'm just like someone else.
Published 2nd Apr 2011
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2nd Apr 2011 8:58pm
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25th May 2011 5:13pm
You have the right idea. I feel like this poem was too much of story telling though. You want to tell a story without actually doing it. Get what I mean? If you use shorter sentences and less words to get your point across it'll be better. Good Job!
