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Just a Thought
Expansion of the mind
Corrosive and unkind
Ignorance is bliss
A timid summer's kiss
Whistful and waiting
Forever lamenting
A Philosopher's Stone
Delving deep into the unknown
Insignificant humanity
Crashing waves of insanity
When the universe unfolds
Humanity will go, untold[/font]
Corrosive and unkind
Ignorance is bliss
A timid summer's kiss
Whistful and waiting
Forever lamenting
A Philosopher's Stone
Delving deep into the unknown
Insignificant humanity
Crashing waves of insanity
When the universe unfolds
Humanity will go, untold[/font]
Published 29th Mar 2011
| Edited 2nd Apr 2011
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31st Mar 2011 6:08pm
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1st Apr 2011 8:30am
Easy to read as in flow but so deep and complex in such a small dose. I liked this piece alot.
2nd Apr 2011 8:13pm
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Anonymous
1st Apr 2011 9:29pm
The rhythm to this is elegant and pure, wafting over the reader like a succulent smell. A charming ditty. I'd suggest you put a comma before "untold" in the final line, as that would be the icing on the cake and make it potent, I think.
2nd Apr 2011 3:05pm
'Wafting over the reader like a succulent smell. A charming ditty' How very eloquent!.....I like that :)
Yes, I like the idea of the comma - I get what you say.
Thank you very much for your insightful and constructive comment
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Yes, I like the idea of the comma - I get what you say.
Thank you very much for your insightful and constructive comment
x
2nd Apr 2011 8:02pm
2nd Apr 2011 8:14pm
