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Listen
Like a ship in a bottle
a mother holding her child
or an old man's cane
still strong but mighty worn
like an unopened book
last month's electric bill
or pictures in a draw
moments collecting dust
like a pigeon in a coop
a barking dog on a chain
or a heart in a cage
not a soul to be found
not a flower to be picked
only the sound of...
a mother holding her child
or an old man's cane
still strong but mighty worn
like an unopened book
last month's electric bill
or pictures in a draw
moments collecting dust
like a pigeon in a coop
a barking dog on a chain
or a heart in a cage
not a soul to be found
not a flower to be picked
only the sound of...
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Re: Listen
19th Jun 2014 11:31pm
Really nice...good advice...I listened, i heard, and i liked what i discovered
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20th Jun 2014 00:24am
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19th Jun 2014 11:42pm
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20th Jun 2014 2:25am
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Anonymous
20th Jun 2014 2:34am
Agreeing w/ Poetikmind (he said it best). Very nice, Hashman.
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20th Jun 2014 11:11pm
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20th Jun 2014 4:17am
Sounds say so much, and you brought that home beautifully...
enjoyed sir...
enjoyed sir...
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20th Jun 2014 11:10pm
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20th Jun 2014 6:23am
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20th Jun 2014 7:31am
...the sound of harmonious existence within and without, the songs of the wind, the caresses of the air...life...living and loving. Couldn't resist, Hashman. That was beautiful.:)
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20th Jun 2014 11:13pm
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20th Jun 2014 1:43pm
It is when we pause to listen with our heart, and soul, that we truly h e a r the combined harmonies of our world....
There is always such insight in your ink...such beauty in the power of your pen, my friend!
There is always such insight in your ink...such beauty in the power of your pen, my friend!
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20th Jun 2014 11:19pm
Re: Listen
20th Jun 2014 4:01pm
Great write!
It is amazing what we can hear if we stop for a second and just listen.
This is a beautiful poem.
Keep up the great work.
I'll be looking forward to more from you. :)
Have a nice day.
It is amazing what we can hear if we stop for a second and just listen.
This is a beautiful poem.
Keep up the great work.
I'll be looking forward to more from you. :)
Have a nice day.
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re: Re: Listen
20th Jun 2014 11:23pm
Truly is...every day it's out there for us (thank you Kat Claws) keep smiling :)
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21st Jun 2014 7:57am
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22nd Jun 2014 5:32am
There is a peace in your flow that I love my friend. As always thank you. Have missed your ink. :)
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Re: Listen
23rd Jun 2014 11:31pm
I read it aloud, listening to the message. It came on silent wings. Beautiful, dear Hash.
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24th Jun 2014 2:05am
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Anonymous
1st Jul 2014 2:44am
Oh yes.......listen to the sound of life. So simple yet powerful. Luv it! Xo :)
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2nd Jul 2014 00:45am
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Anonymous
2nd Jul 2014 2:16am
Awe......i'm blushing light purple. MAWH!! Xo :)
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19th Jul 2014 10:26pm
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5th Nov 2014 9:54am
This read smoothly. I like how you used concrete imagery, as in things we all know and see. Also, as others said, love the simplicity. Nice write.
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