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Endemic
There's a cosmic string of independence,
getting wider with each struggle.
I shrug off the chrysalis — there are no wings of grace.
Predictably, I stutter from one challenge to the next.
I have a star orbit's worth of space
and most have charted other, distant skies.
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Re: Endemic
13th Jun 2014 4:14pm
Well this was a wicked spin on emotion-Absolute Excellence Dear Atakti!!!
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Re: Endemic
13th Jun 2014 4:23pm
I love this economy of words to make the point go BAM!
I have no critique, this is Rockstar quality!
I have no critique, this is Rockstar quality!
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13th Jun 2014 7:28pm
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Re: Endemic
14th Jun 2014 1:21am
born into a life of labor & adversity. a butterfly w/o wings is a thing of beauty & sorrow...
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re: Re: Endemic
14th Jun 2014 7:24pm
If you see beauty, it says more about you, Feddeler.
Thank you for stopping by!
Thank you for stopping by!
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Anonymous
14th Jun 2014 8:48am
In awe...the cosmic queen floated off to her starlit heavens......

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14th Jun 2014 7:25pm
Re: Endemic
14th Jun 2014 1:49pm
A spirit confined....in need of release...('rebirth')--"I have a star orbit's worth of space/and most have charted other ,distant skies"
As always--compelled by the power of your pen, my friend!
As always--compelled by the power of your pen, my friend!
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re: Re: Endemic
14th Jun 2014 7:27pm
I'm honoured the Enchantress stopped by!
I like those lines best myself, thank you for noticing.
I like those lines best myself, thank you for noticing.
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Anonymous
24th Jun 2014 6:06pm
In this short ditty your word economy shines the brightest.
No physical wings are needed when floating on the exacting language of your words.
Very well penned, Miss!
No physical wings are needed when floating on the exacting language of your words.
Very well penned, Miss!

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25th Jun 2014 5:55am