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To My Wall
Cloud swells in my chest, hurt
gathers for release to my healing;
A father's gift.
Sharp pains in my eye reflect a fight
unwanted and unneeded, because
tough is not fist endurance.
My worth is not there, never was. How
could a kid ever understand a mans
war and kill smells?
Dirty words were color and feelings
breath is sacred to those once
denied, and fuck you.
He's mine now. We hug every morning.
Your love of freedom of speech, those
old copies of Editor & Publisher,
my place to escape in books...
I want you to know, I wrote a book.
And there is a dedication page, and I
broke the rules, not mom, not King,
not America, not you...
I dedicated it to me and cleansed it with my tears.
Chris Whitenack © 2014
gathers for release to my healing;
A father's gift.
Sharp pains in my eye reflect a fight
unwanted and unneeded, because
tough is not fist endurance.
My worth is not there, never was. How
could a kid ever understand a mans
war and kill smells?
Dirty words were color and feelings
breath is sacred to those once
denied, and fuck you.
He's mine now. We hug every morning.
Your love of freedom of speech, those
old copies of Editor & Publisher,
my place to escape in books...
I want you to know, I wrote a book.
And there is a dedication page, and I
broke the rules, not mom, not King,
not America, not you...
I dedicated it to me and cleansed it with my tears.
Chris Whitenack © 2014
Published 13th Jun 2014
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Anonymous
13th Jun 2014 8:50am
That last line is just so powerful. The theme of redemption here and self immolation just screams from the lines.
Your writing reminds me very much of Ted Hughes. There's that seething quality hidden behind stark images and villainous upset.
In the first stanza, I can't help but feel a semi colon may work better than a full stop after "release to my healing" so that this carries on to the next thought "a father's gift". This is my only niggle really.
Just my own opinion of course, doesn't have to be listened too.
Thank you for the read.
Your writing reminds me very much of Ted Hughes. There's that seething quality hidden behind stark images and villainous upset.
In the first stanza, I can't help but feel a semi colon may work better than a full stop after "release to my healing" so that this carries on to the next thought "a father's gift". This is my only niggle really.
Just my own opinion of course, doesn't have to be listened too.
Thank you for the read.
13th Jun 2014 5:32pm
Hmm, I must read this Ted Hughes.
Thank you soooo much, AND
advice tried, advice heeded.
Congrats, you just became "co-writer" :-D
Thank you soooo much, AND
advice tried, advice heeded.
Congrats, you just became "co-writer" :-D
