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last-drinks love song
no sense not sayin’ what it must be
although she doesn’t like the name
but since I drive a red convertible
and she is half my age
it stands to reason it’s a mid-life thing
makes sense too
since I think about dying more and more
and about what
if anything
this life is for
and the answers I get
make me want to run
but then again
I always run
so her being half my age isn’t a game
any more than any of them ever were
and as for the convertible
well I’ve had that for years
and aging is something I’m ok at
cos I never expected to go out in prime condition
always figured I’d be second hand
by the time I was laying down the last time
so we lay in bed last night
and I made that joke about her
how she must be my mid-life thing
and like I said
she didn’t like it
reckoned it made her a cartoon
so I said fair enough
then fucked her like I meant it
in colour
and 3D
then lay back after
in the darkness
remembering the ones before her
they came and went
they come and go
and it’s enough
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Re: last-drinks love song
29th May 2014 6:18am
love like that breaks us down, slowly. 'they came & went.' I think they took a little piece of you w/them, man...
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re: Re: last-drinks love song
29th May 2014 6:21am
Re: last-drinks love song
29th May 2014 10:01am
makes sense too
since I think about dying more and more ... Love this line and subsequent stanza ... I find myself asking this as a question more and more lately (why am I here?) ... funny I can't get a straight answer
... As always I enjoyed your raw unflinching way of telling a story
since I think about dying more and more ... Love this line and subsequent stanza ... I find myself asking this as a question more and more lately (why am I here?) ... funny I can't get a straight answer
... As always I enjoyed your raw unflinching way of telling a story
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re: Re: last-drinks love song
30th May 2014 4:15pm
Good man….thanks for letting me know where your head went…not sure about 'sense' though…never did have a lick of it :-)
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Re: last-drinks love song
30th May 2014 4:25pm
When you're shooting from the hip - it's hard to hit the target - cool writings as ever tho
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re: Re: last-drinks love song
30th May 2014 4:36pm
Re: last-drinks love song
30th May 2014 9:21pm
There's a fingertip thinness between your writing and an elusive ... epiphany? You keep circling, in a holding pattern, but it seems to get slightly tighter after every loop.
Sooner or later, someone (you) will spot the air control tower and do an unauthorised fly-by.
No, I'm not quite sure what I mean either, never mind. Good to see your ink again, hemi.
Sooner or later, someone (you) will spot the air control tower and do an unauthorised fly-by.
No, I'm not quite sure what I mean either, never mind. Good to see your ink again, hemi.
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re: Re: last-drinks love song
30th May 2014 10:46pm
yeah…not sure why I'm reminded of a moth auguring in to a candle, but let's not over think it :-)
Cheers A…seems like maybe the words came back a couple of days ago, and by god I missed them….happy to see them work for you too :-)
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Cheers A…seems like maybe the words came back a couple of days ago, and by god I missed them….happy to see them work for you too :-)
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Re: last-drinks love song
31st May 2014 4:13am
if you worship vagina or at least love it,its jus natural to go back and forth.i love my boat when it floats.got a hole in the hull,still fn love her but im cussing her.....
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re: Re: last-drinks love song
31st May 2014 9:35am
mate….possibly the best and worst advice or kind of moral philosophy I've ever heard, and I deeply respect that….
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Re: last-drinks love song
5th Jun 2014 4:33pm
Well, I haven't been on for a while, but, true as ever, you are still belting them out with the most real-life, soul-shaking honesty I have seen. Quite good.
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re: Re: last-drinks love song
6th Jun 2014 2:49am
Well hello S...nice to see you around. Cheers for the love my dear...not an earth-shaker of a poem, but nice to see it getting love anyway :-)
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Re: last-drinks love song
22nd Jun 2014 5:34am
You look down while walking paying attention to the path because where it leads is the thing we try not to see. A life lived well is the only elixir that will make that bed worth climbing into, and the rest comfortable. Live, enjoy each other's time, drink deep drafts of that elixir, and find that bed warm and welcoming.
Good to see your writing again.
Good to see your writing again.
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re: Re: last-drinks love song
23rd Jun 2014 5:32am
PTM...good to see you looking around mate....as for the rest, yes, seize the day (or whatever she calls it :-)
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Re: last-drinks love song
23rd Jun 2014 7:14am
It doesn't have to be true love to give great satisfaction does it? we all leave a piece of us with those we touch one way or another.. I love that you have peace with that.. with respect Crim
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re: Re: last-drinks love song
23rd Jun 2014 8:09am