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A Passing at the Lake
He passed me by the lake
heads down, cap tipped low
a robust man who loved
his food and beverages
there was lightning in the sky
no brightness in that day
it was a perfect miserable afternoon
a nippy day, with strong wind
the robust man walked into the shallows
and never stopped, he just moved on
to the deepest and disappeared
a few bubbles and all was calm again
standing there rooted in great dismay
I watched this passing by the lake
Until I remember a call I had to make
They never found him to this day.
heads down, cap tipped low
a robust man who loved
his food and beverages
there was lightning in the sky
no brightness in that day
it was a perfect miserable afternoon
a nippy day, with strong wind
the robust man walked into the shallows
and never stopped, he just moved on
to the deepest and disappeared
a few bubbles and all was calm again
standing there rooted in great dismay
I watched this passing by the lake
Until I remember a call I had to make
They never found him to this day.
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Re: A Passing at the Lake
16th May 2014 2:23am
Moving Write Dear Grace-plays intense, quiet and sad-as a gripping dream-Excellence!!!
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re: Re: A Passing at the Lake
16th May 2014 2:10pm
Re: A Passing at the Lake
Anonymous
17th May 2014 4:35am
Ooh! Your tone here is well voiced, this piece has a great rhythm, well done Grace.
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re: Re: A Passing at the Lake
17th May 2014 7:50am
Re: A Passing at the Lake
17th May 2014 5:32pm
Your storytelling is superb, though somber
I truly felt like I saw the entire scene take place
Well done! :)
I truly felt like I saw the entire scene take place
Well done! :)
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18th May 2014 6:31am
Re: A Passing at the Lake
Anonymous
17th May 2014 6:01pm
This is rather chilling to me. Nice work! ^-^
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18th May 2014 6:31am
Re: A Passing at the Lake
19th May 2014 4:16pm
A perfect miserable afternoon indeed to let go of one's precious life, just because someone forgot to make that much awaited call. Nice story poem, somewhat eerie and arouse my curiousity.
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20th May 2014 2:13am
Re. A Passing at the Lake
27th Aug 2016 8:18am
A somber tale. I like to write about my dreams too. Enjoyed this. Well written. :)
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Re: Re. A Passing at the Lake
27th Aug 2016 11:07am
Hi Daniel...you should write about your dreams...especially if it seems to carry a message. Id love to read them. :) thanks for reading me.