Harvest

I like the words you use in this a lot, it's very descriptive, but a little mysterious in meaning too.

I do have a question, when you wrote "ready to be reaped by the maker"--is this a poem about incest? If not, I wasn't sure what you meant by this line.

The "stems spread" part almost invites another allusion to a delicate flower, just something to consider.

There is one other suggestion I might make and that is to reconsider the line about 'hot enough to reshape iron.' It isn't bad but for some reason it stands out to me as a weaker line.

I hope this helps and good luck!

This is a piece about incest- only reason why I put it under extreme content
I appreciate the comment and critique.
I'll work on strengthening that line- it does sound a little weak.
Thanks so much,
Madi

I definitely feel the power behind this poem. its really well written and not to descriptive as to scare off the reader. i don't think clarifying its about incest is necessary but it helps to bring light to it from other directions. i agree with Dragon about the flower allusion a suggestion if you don't mind. id say after "by thin featherlike lips" id say something about petals. just a thought. I did really enjoy the read. Great Write

Thanks for the feedback Asylum-will take it into consideration and work on fixing it up.

This was a deep write!!
Love the read and write!!
That pen loves pretty you so much!!

Sir Lancelott

Thanks, lance.
Your pen has quite the fancy for you too!
Read on hun.

A sad write and I hope it only came from your imagination. Good write.