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another dead ends
there was no point in even trying or hoping was there?
I'm not in charge
they are
they like to juggle precious stones in front of my eyes
then make them disappear
it's just another unfinished hand-job
I don't get to keep anything good in this life
it's just history repeating itself
over and over and over and over...
life is NOT what you make of it
life is what it decides it wants to be towards you
(we'll never get to see each other again will we?)
I'm not in charge
they are
they like to juggle precious stones in front of my eyes
then make them disappear
it's just another unfinished hand-job
I don't get to keep anything good in this life
it's just history repeating itself
over and over and over and over...
life is NOT what you make of it
life is what it decides it wants to be towards you
(we'll never get to see each other again will we?)
Published 16th Mar 2011
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18th Mar 2011 10:33am
I have mixed feelings for this one. On the one hand i feel like i missed something even though i read it twice. There's something left unsaid; "they like" who are they? no point in even trying about what?
On the other hand though i liked the last 2 lines about life's philosophy.
On the other hand though i liked the last 2 lines about life's philosophy.
19th Mar 2011 1:36am
"they" is whoever's maybe be in charge. the unseen force. whether it be god(s) aliens or just blind nature... whoevers pulling the strings behind the curtain and making life occur the way it is...
no point in hoping for something good in my life when everything i try hits that dead end... my art never sells no matter where i put it... my writing well i havent heard from the publisher who was suppose to publish my book this year.. my love life its either a long wait in between or some kind of bullshit when it comes my way...
this isnt self pity i know there are others. many other that life is not going their way no matter what they try and i hate when people say stuff like life is what you make of it or you gotta make yourself happy... bullshit... so many get shit on in life and it's not their fault or the way theyd want it no matter what they try... and it seems the assholes in life get more coming their way... which is even more sickening
but whatever "no body said life would be easy" well fuck you "i never said i wanted this fucking life"
no point in hoping for something good in my life when everything i try hits that dead end... my art never sells no matter where i put it... my writing well i havent heard from the publisher who was suppose to publish my book this year.. my love life its either a long wait in between or some kind of bullshit when it comes my way...
this isnt self pity i know there are others. many other that life is not going their way no matter what they try and i hate when people say stuff like life is what you make of it or you gotta make yourself happy... bullshit... so many get shit on in life and it's not their fault or the way theyd want it no matter what they try... and it seems the assholes in life get more coming their way... which is even more sickening
but whatever "no body said life would be easy" well fuck you "i never said i wanted this fucking life"
26th Mar 2011 8:56am
I can feel every ounce of emotion behind each and every line and it is very easy to relate to in my own personal way.
I read this with a certain tightness in my heart,
it was hard to read and heavy, perhaps that's just my low mood, or the honesty or just the way i related .
overall its a fantastic poem and im sorry you were/are feeling this way
I read this with a certain tightness in my heart,
it was hard to read and heavy, perhaps that's just my low mood, or the honesty or just the way i related .
overall its a fantastic poem and im sorry you were/are feeling this way
26th Mar 2011 9:06am
there was a ton of hurting angry sad emotion put into this.. i'm glad you got such a strong reaction from it. thats what i want to do with my poetry . even when its not heavily fucked up and evil like my rape and pedophiac ones i still want to have my way with words and also show my audience that im not a one trick pony. cheers to you riyah. thanks for such a wonderful comment
26th Mar 2011 9:22am
Well you deffo came across strong man,
keep up the hard work, and you're welcome :)
keep up the hard work, and you're welcome :)
