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my dad
years passed...
holes in my history
images don't add up.
I know one without the other ..
so many nights laying awake
wondering,questioning was i the mistake
that made you leave .
why was not I important enough
for you to be around.
was i the cold blooded thing
that drove you away.
half of me is unknown i cant explain.
its like i blade seperating my other
half....
holes in my history
images don't add up.
I know one without the other ..
so many nights laying awake
wondering,questioning was i the mistake
that made you leave .
why was not I important enough
for you to be around.
was i the cold blooded thing
that drove you away.
half of me is unknown i cant explain.
its like i blade seperating my other
half....
Published 4th Mar 2011
| Edited 6th Mar 2011
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4th Mar 2011 9:58pm
dark_heart, I like this, but its to sparse for me...I want to hear more..lots of images in here..
half of me is unknown..I like that.
years passed...
holes in my history
images don't add up.
I know one without the other ..
that creates one hell of a image I think.
who`s mistake are we talking about.. anyway I like this write good read. Lane
p.s. one more verse and a small chorus this would be a song I do believe.
half of me is unknown..I like that.
years passed...
holes in my history
images don't add up.
I know one without the other ..
that creates one hell of a image I think.
who`s mistake are we talking about.. anyway I like this write good read. Lane
p.s. one more verse and a small chorus this would be a song I do believe.
4th Mar 2011 11:40pm
oh that i thought was my parnets i thought i was never supposed to be born but now i dont see that way
5th Mar 2011 6:51pm
6th Mar 2011 3:08am
cool i think if that feelings not good the not cool but now i feel confused wait what was i talking about uummm...oh well
4th Mar 2011 10:07pm
I know how you feel this is a good piece, what I do with these type of poems is to write a few-one based on the anger,one based on the feeling of missing something.Don't worry about the future you will be fine, if anything it also makes some great poetry so makes something good out of a bad situation.Good luck mate xx
4th Mar 2011 11:33pm
