deepundergroundpoetry.com
Evil Eyes
Like the darkness that has set upon me
I look through its eyes with loathing
For what has become of me you will not see
Eventualy you will be the wiser
I look through its eyes with loathing
For what has become of me you will not see
Eventualy you will be the wiser
Published 2nd Mar 2011
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 5
reading list entries 1
comments 8
reads 2593
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
2nd Mar 2011 1:59am
2nd Mar 2011 2:05am
2nd Mar 2011 8:11pm
2nd Mar 2011 9:08pm
2nd Mar 2011 8:23pm
...darkish and too short.
Nothing to really get your teeth into or get too excited about.
Do you have another stanza?
I feel a bit cheated with 4 lines that verge more into grey than the dark.
Hooded
Nothing to really get your teeth into or get too excited about.
Do you have another stanza?
I feel a bit cheated with 4 lines that verge more into grey than the dark.
Hooded
2nd Mar 2011 9:07pm
I'm sorry you feel cheated
It is actually a work in progress...
The words come from some part of my mind that
i frequently visit, but not enjoy to much.
So ill be working on another stanza
Just thought i should put it out there, not for anyone really but for myself.
I know you're going to ask me why put it on this forum, well just to get some criticism like yours.
So thanks,
Ron...
It is actually a work in progress...
The words come from some part of my mind that
i frequently visit, but not enjoy to much.
So ill be working on another stanza
Just thought i should put it out there, not for anyone really but for myself.
I know you're going to ask me why put it on this forum, well just to get some criticism like yours.
So thanks,
Ron...
3rd Mar 2011 3:27pm
Ron,
I look forward to this work in progress...it does need more, but you know that already. As completed piece, I did feel cheated, now I know there is more to come...I'll let you off!
LOL!
Hooded
I look forward to this work in progress...it does need more, but you know that already. As completed piece, I did feel cheated, now I know there is more to come...I'll let you off!
LOL!
Hooded
29th Mar 2013 3:27pm
