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Pantoum about the poem 'It rains in my heart', by Paul Verlaine
It rains in my heart
As it rains in the city,
What is this dark pity
The languour of my heart?
As it rains in the city
Feel that tears well up
The languour of my heart
Is a great pain of my body
Feel that tears well up
The heart beats quickening
Is a great pain of my body
I sense my life weakening
The heart beats quickening
It rains always in my heart
I sense my life weakening
What is this dark pity
Published 10th Feb 2014
| Edited 11th Feb 2014
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11th Feb 2014 1:49am
I've mentioned how much i liked the subject of this piece Malin, its melancholy and thoughtful and great effort in pantoum form.
11th Feb 2014 7:52am
I have tried to restore, by this way the musical rythme of the french text from Verlaine, but pantoum is not an easy form, when I try to get rhymes!!! The result is not at the level I would like to get, but a very interesting exercise!! Thank you for your comment, Vee and your support!
11th Feb 2014 5:26am
11th Feb 2014 7:55am
Yes, I like this metaphor also, which was included in the original text by Verlaine. I humbly have tried to restitute the atmospher! Thank you for reading and for your comment, Myth!
11th Feb 2014 5:12pm
11th Feb 2014 5:29pm
Thank you so much, Grace! I started with a fantastic base, and humbly, I have tried to build a pantoum! Because of the music of this form of poetry!! Proud you read it and by your comment!
