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the itch
Sometimes life is such a bitch
that death comes along to scratch the itch
the one who from earthly life is unhitched
finds heaven in a six foot ditch
that death comes along to scratch the itch
the one who from earthly life is unhitched
finds heaven in a six foot ditch
Published 30th Jan 2014
| Edited 31st Jan 2014
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Anonymous
30th Jan 2014 11:03pm
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31st Jan 2014 7:18pm
Greatly done!!!
I'm getting an impression that this poem should be broken up into 4 lines.
Unless you want to hid the rhyme a little bit.
I'm getting an impression that this poem should be broken up into 4 lines.
Unless you want to hid the rhyme a little bit.
31st Jan 2014 7:27pm
well it started off as just the first two lines which was writen as a cleverly rhyming sentence. then later i added the second line. so yea i could separate it or leave as is..
31st Jan 2014 10:25pm
Wow! A morbid thought but some do feel death is the ultimate peace... Xo
Wonderful Raven! :)
Wonderful Raven! :)
well.. it might seem morbid but not realy.. its all about how you look at it.. i mean if you see death as an ultimate end then yea i guess its pretty morbid..idk.. im not saying death is better than life.. but its like finaly kicking off your shoes after running a mile..
16th Mar 2014 6:22am
Anonymous
28th Jan 2015 10:43pm
Brilliant.. really like this one.. Your flow, and rhyming abilities are great..
Dave
Dave
