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Black Umbrellas
Bag pipes
bleed sadness
into the air,
everyone walks
tragically slow
heads held low
concentrating
on the black road,
roses shall be thrown
one by one
dreams become
handfuls of dirt
to be tossed on
a shiny wooden box below
tears water the ground,
the sun hides behind
black clouds
threatening never
to show itself again
and why should it?
the bleakness
the emptiness
flourish in
the dark
that becomes us.
bleed sadness
into the air,
everyone walks
tragically slow
heads held low
concentrating
on the black road,
roses shall be thrown
one by one
dreams become
handfuls of dirt
to be tossed on
a shiny wooden box below
tears water the ground,
the sun hides behind
black clouds
threatening never
to show itself again
and why should it?
the bleakness
the emptiness
flourish in
the dark
that becomes us.
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Re: Black Umbrellas
29th Jan 2014 1:55am
I found this in my drafts...I have one like it somewhere, I think...not sure...
Re: Black Umbrellas
29th Jan 2014 4:32am
You know the minute I saw the title in my notifications... I had to peek in. :)
I love this piece Nikki! I could feel the gloom, and smell the mourning. The vision of sadness was beautifully vivid. Your word choice and form was magnificent....Xo
I love this piece Nikki! I could feel the gloom, and smell the mourning. The vision of sadness was beautifully vivid. Your word choice and form was magnificent....Xo
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Re: Black Umbrellas
Anonymous
29th Jan 2014 4:35am
Deep mood painted here, was right there from the first image. Nice lyrical flow and wonderful ending. Thank you! Mike.
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Re: Black Umbrellas
29th Jan 2014 12:40pm
Re: Black Umbrellas
29th Jan 2014 1:41pm
This reminded me of my sister-in-law's funeral in a remote part of Scotland. It was a bleak day overlooking the beautiful loch; the weak sun trying to compete with the scudding clouds and rain.
A very evocative piece Nikki well done.
A very evocative piece Nikki well done.
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Re: Black Umbrellas
29th Jan 2014 11:16pm
Quite the Anti-Mary(Poppins) effect!!!
This Write was slick, punched the whole slide down!!!
This Write was slick, punched the whole slide down!!!
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Re: Black Umbrellas
30th Jan 2014 00:24am
This brought back vivid memories of my nieces fiancé who left us much too soon...
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Re: Black Umbrellas
31st Jan 2014 2:53am
Feels like the clock ticking inside the crocodile to read this one out loud. An Agatha Christie "And then there were none" kind of feeling.
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Re: Black Umbrellas
Anonymous
1st Feb 2014 12:16pm
I really think this is one the best poems I have read by you so far.....the atmosphere is so great!
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Re: Black Umbrellas
6th Mar 2014 3:46am