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Chained
My heart, a balloon
Firmly held down by a cord
Will burst with restraint
Thanks to both of you, Poetikmind and Paul S... for your help with the preposition in the last line. I hate them. And love you, dear friends!
Firmly held down by a cord
Will burst with restraint
Thanks to both of you, Poetikmind and Paul S... for your help with the preposition in the last line. I hate them. And love you, dear friends!
Published 28th Jan 2014
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28th Jan 2014 9:30pm
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28th Jan 2014 9:33pm
And I enjoyed your lovely comment, Gabriel! Thank you profoundly for reading me.
28th Jan 2014 11:22pm
29th Jan 2014 00:12am
Things or feelings which are not restrained will always be there. Tricky thing to pen them! Thank you for your understanding and your wise words!
28th Jan 2014 11:44pm
28th Jan 2014 11:50pm
your poems, balloons
that can't be pinned
down without explo
ding (!) all around me..:)
love it, as usual..:)
that can't be pinned
down without explo
ding (!) all around me..:)
love it, as usual..:)
29th Jan 2014 00:14am
Ahhh, that's sweet, Paul! Thank you so much for the lovely image! A bunch of colorful balloons invading our poetical space. Let them float!
29th Jan 2014 00:23am
Fascinating analogy of the balloon that will burst if held back. Think there are a few "devils' around who will try to pop it with a pin!
29th Jan 2014 00:28am
All the sweet poet devils on DU for example :-)!
There are always devils around to pop your floating dreams. So better not hold them back but let them float! Thanks a lot, JAZZMANOR, for your kind comment!
There are always devils around to pop your floating dreams. So better not hold them back but let them float! Thanks a lot, JAZZMANOR, for your kind comment!
29th Jan 2014 1:39am
This is wonderful ... I can see that balloon running away to new heights!
29th Jan 2014 10:52am
Unrestrained ...
Thank you for the image you're sharing! All balloons should be released! The sky would be so colorful.
Thank you for the image you're sharing! All balloons should be released! The sky would be so colorful.
29th Jan 2014 2:10am
When the fantasy
flies free
it can get hot.
Why not :-)?
Appreciate your wise comment much, Speak! Thank you!
flies free
it can get hot.
Why not :-)?
Appreciate your wise comment much, Speak! Thank you!
29th Jan 2014 11:26am
Why restrain indeed? you are the Mistress of
Haiku n Senryu! Bang, you 'spit it' again :)
Haiku n Senryu! Bang, you 'spit it' again :)
29th Jan 2014 12:38pm
Yes, why? But there are always people
who try to hold you captive ...
like a captive balloon?
I blush and curtsey and like to give
my warm thanks to your kind comment, Poe!
who try to hold you captive ...
like a captive balloon?
I blush and curtsey and like to give
my warm thanks to your kind comment, Poe!
29th Jan 2014 4:05pm
Oh I know this feeling very well. Great write Chiyo. I love the short meaningful poems. They get my inspiration flowing.
29th Jan 2014 6:59pm
Or perhaps floating :-)? Thank you for your meaningful and kind comment! Much appreciation!
30th Jan 2014 00:32am
30th Jan 2014 11:33am
Glad that you find this piece worth thinking about, JeJe. I very much appreciate your thoughts and I'd like to thank you for the reading list entry, too!
30th Jan 2014 3:02am
30th Jan 2014 11:35am
You have read out the essence of this senryu and expressed your understanding so very well, John. Thank you for your thoughtful comment, always.
31st Jan 2014 5:58pm
31st Jan 2014 11:02pm
