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Cheap Vodka
I used to draw from you
Drank your spirit
But you lost yourself in your own lies
And then you wanted the truth
But only if it was your truth
How many times could I want you
How many times was it not enough
You were once always by my side
But you challenged me by never exposing the real darkness
What do I do with you now
I’m walking away
You are stale beer
Bad wine
Cheap vodka
Not worth my scorn
Or even my lies
Drank your spirit
But you lost yourself in your own lies
And then you wanted the truth
But only if it was your truth
How many times could I want you
How many times was it not enough
You were once always by my side
But you challenged me by never exposing the real darkness
What do I do with you now
I’m walking away
You are stale beer
Bad wine
Cheap vodka
Not worth my scorn
Or even my lies
Published 26th Jan 2014
| Edited 11th May 2018
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26th Jan 2014 3:03am
That's pretty bad when someones not even worthy enough of lies!Feeling this write my friend, enjoyed.
26th Jan 2014 3:06am
You have a point there.
This is a poem to let you'll know I'm not Joe Romantic all the time.
Thx Tommie
This is a poem to let you'll know I'm not Joe Romantic all the time.
Thx Tommie
26th Jan 2014 8:01am
this cuts to the core of how indifference is more final than hating the one who's done you wrong.
26th Jan 2014 1:17pm
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26th Jan 2014 2:02pm
Speak this is so raw and deep ladened with so much pain. The last sentence sums it up so well.
26th Jan 2014 2:17pm
Thx for reading Nadia
After I wrote it, I no longer felt anything and I was able to move on.
After I wrote it, I no longer felt anything and I was able to move on.
26th Jan 2014 2:46pm
This touches something I cannot describe...
How many times could I want you.
Sadly too many. Loved reading you as always Sir x
How many times could I want you.
Sadly too many. Loved reading you as always Sir x
26th Jan 2014 2:50pm
I felt much better after writing this and moving on.
It was a long battle of the mind but happily over.
It was a long battle of the mind but happily over.
26th Jan 2014 8:03pm
I like seeing a different side of you. This was a powerful that first stanzas was amazing. It gave me goosebumps.
::I used to draw from you
Drank your spirit
But you lost yourself in your own lies
And then you wanted the truth
But only if it was your truth::
Thanks for sharing this.
::I used to draw from you
Drank your spirit
But you lost yourself in your own lies
And then you wanted the truth
But only if it was your truth::
Thanks for sharing this.
26th Jan 2014 8:13pm
Thanks Ella
Was working through the end of something when I write that awhile back. It helped me move on.
Was working through the end of something when I write that awhile back. It helped me move on.
26th Jan 2014 9:40pm
Deepness here in your words. Unfortunately when the effects of drinking them away seem like they're gone.....their memory lives in the emptiness of the bottle. Felt this. :(
26th Jan 2014 9:44pm
Yes, flower, you are right.
It was a hard write after a painful experience.
Felt better though after penning it though.
Thx for reading and feedback.
It was a hard write after a painful experience.
Felt better though after penning it though.
Thx for reading and feedback.
27th Jan 2014 3:12am
"By never exposing the real darkness"
So touching and real. And seeing each other's broken places is the point, right? Insightful. Thank you, Sir. ;)
So touching and real. And seeing each other's broken places is the point, right? Insightful. Thank you, Sir. ;)
27th Jan 2014 3:22am
It takes a long time to get to the core. Often its just to scary to confront the need. Its a wild ride though, filled with joyful intense discovery. We know who we are, right ?
Thank you for following me.
x
Thank you for following me.
x
27th Jan 2014 3:22am
heart rip out of a write my friend.. truth is always an impressive story and don't take this the wrong way but
stale beer
Bad wine
Cheap vodka ...
still makes me thirsty (just let me take out the discared cigs and i'll drink that shit up), it goes down like regret beore i even piss it out
stale beer
Bad wine
Cheap vodka ...
still makes me thirsty (just let me take out the discared cigs and i'll drink that shit up), it goes down like regret beore i even piss it out
27th Jan 2014 3:28am
28th Jan 2014 2:38am
28th Jan 2014 2:39am
He is an influence
But this is all mine about an affair gone sour
Thx for reading. Appreciate it.
But this is all mine about an affair gone sour
Thx for reading. Appreciate it.
21st Mar 2015 6:48pm
Sometimes indifference is the only tool for walking away. Deal with the pain of it afterwards. Functioning, moving, breathing.
21st Mar 2015 7:12pm
thought about this situation for a long time and then cut the cord or the cord was cut on me, or it was mutual
ironically we are friends now but it took some time to reshape
ironically we are friends now but it took some time to reshape
