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'Astral-Logical'
Ghost...why must you haunt
thy nightly dreams?
Spiraling 'round n' 'round,
an apparition beckoning
to comfort thee harrowed screams...
Ghost...please don't despair
thine own weather darkened
by hollowed home desolate,
lying in disrepair...
Ghost...unshackle thee
from enchanted bonds,
bound by conflagration
of an ill-tended soul,
true-fall from the fires
of affection awaiting far beyond
Ghost...come gather unto thee
less the substance, breathes
icy fear, that astral aura of love
could be what sets desires free...
thy nightly dreams?
Spiraling 'round n' 'round,
an apparition beckoning
to comfort thee harrowed screams...
Ghost...please don't despair
thine own weather darkened
by hollowed home desolate,
lying in disrepair...
Ghost...unshackle thee
from enchanted bonds,
bound by conflagration
of an ill-tended soul,
true-fall from the fires
of affection awaiting far beyond
Ghost...come gather unto thee
less the substance, breathes
icy fear, that astral aura of love
could be what sets desires free...
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23rd Jan 2014 7:24pm
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23rd Jan 2014 9:39pm
This felt dark and gloomy to me. Even eerie. I get the spiritual connection with the ghostly presence though... I loved your wordplay in this piece, Poe! Third stanza was my favorite! A wonderful read...Xo
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24th Jan 2014 00:17am
Yes it was gloomy but hey it can't always be sunshine n roses right? lol thank you my dear Rain, appreciate you much!
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24th Jan 2014 5:12am
I went spiritual because of the 'spirits' of ghosts
fighting it's urges to stay away from a love so strong, it transcends space n time... At least I tried to convey that lol
fighting it's urges to stay away from a love so strong, it transcends space n time... At least I tried to convey that lol
Re: 'Astral-Logical'
24th Jan 2014 1:56am
Even with the ghostly tones, I found this piece really calming to read...
love the words;
Ghost...unshackle thee
from enchanted bonds,
Always so privileged that you post x
love the words;
Ghost...unshackle thee
from enchanted bonds,
Always so privileged that you post x
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24th Jan 2014 5:16am
Aaaawwww c'mere n let me kiss ur sweet mouth!
Gosh u make me blush! Thank your sweetie, always pleased
to have your support n thoughts on my page :)
Gosh u make me blush! Thank your sweetie, always pleased
to have your support n thoughts on my page :)
Re: 'Astral-Logical'
24th Jan 2014 3:27am
Ahhh 'astral aura of love
could be what sets desires free...' Only love can... Deeply as always!
could be what sets desires free...' Only love can... Deeply as always!
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24th Jan 2014 5:19am
Yup, the astral love was what I was going for! :) happy you enjoyed my dear, n yea, deep is good no? :) thank you
for your thoughts n support my friend :)
for your thoughts n support my friend :)
Re: 'Astral-Logical'
24th Jan 2014 3:54am
I'll echo Heart in the peaceful calming effect this had Mr P. I might read it a few more times I'm thinking. Awesome, young man.
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24th Jan 2014 5:22am
Happy to hear it had a calming effect for you bro. I wouldn't want my 'ghost' to give u any problems lol... Seriously, I'm grateful for all your support n friendship bro!
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24th Jan 2014 4:00am
o wow this was truly Beautiful!!!
fav line
"true-fall from the fires
of affection awaiting far beyond"
fav line
"true-fall from the fires
of affection awaiting far beyond"
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24th Jan 2014 5:25am
Aaaawwww thank you precious one! So pleased you enjoyed this, n always n forever grateful for your continued support :)
Re: 'Astral-Logical'
24th Jan 2014 6:32am
Yes agree with above comments poetik xD
the 3rd stanza was very good indeed
the 3rd stanza was very good indeed
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24th Jan 2014 1:01pm
My sweetest Rose, I thank you n deeply appreciate you
n all your support always :)
n all your support always :)
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24th Jan 2014 6:49am
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24th Jan 2014 11:00pm
Ah yes. a poem relevant to the happenings in life currently.
of course, we must let go of our sadness, all the demons --and ghosts- which hold us back,
and let love in.
easier said than done!!
love the write :)
of course, we must let go of our sadness, all the demons --and ghosts- which hold us back,
and let love in.
easier said than done!!
love the write :)
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24th Jan 2014 11:39pm
Thank you sweetness, you nailed the concept n I'm happy you enjoyed... Truly appreciate your time n thoughts :)
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25th Jan 2014 3:30pm
How it can haunt. Well written and expressed Poetikmind. Been there and can understand. :)
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25th Jan 2014 6:51pm