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Pick Me
When I begin to feel again all those wild thoughts take over my mind.
I'm fucked again.Standing in the middle of a old fashioned school yard
circle.Picked last but never really taken.Looking silly.Got a quick taste of love,
and just as quick it was gone.
I'm fucked again.Standing in the middle of a old fashioned school yard
circle.Picked last but never really taken.Looking silly.Got a quick taste of love,
and just as quick it was gone.
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Re: Pick Me
Anonymous
20th Jan 2014 2:51pm
dat feelin makes awl uv us crazee poeitess lyke in da fukkin sckulyard agin ain't tew bad I gess rm
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20th Jan 2014 3:35pm
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20th Jan 2014 2:55pm
Pretty as a picture this is Tommie Lynn. Sad, but pretty. Wanna play on my team? I get to pick first. Lol. Thank you TL. XO
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20th Jan 2014 3:38pm
I'd love to be picked first, I'll play on your team Twitch.I appreciate your words so much.Thank you. XO
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20th Jan 2014 4:53pm
Isn't that interesting how scarring the simple picking of teams can be. I've thought that if I were a PE coach I'd choose the kids, typically chosen last, as my team captains.
You've evoked some tender memories with this beautiful piece. Bravisima poeta!
You've evoked some tender memories with this beautiful piece. Bravisima poeta!
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20th Jan 2014 5:00pm
I was told everyone (the boys) were afraid of me...I was always picked last, it's all good, put me in that circle now bitches!!LMFAO.Thanks for reading and your words GW and the add to your RL. :)
Re: Pick Me
20th Jan 2014 5:05pm
Found it interesting that you describe the idea of being picked last as "wild".
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re: Re: Pick Me
20th Jan 2014 5:09pm
Wild as in dirty not last...Save the best for last or so "they " say.I appreciate you reading. Thank you JAZZ.
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20th Jan 2014 5:32pm
Ah okay. For me that definition never made a mark because I always reminded myself that teams would be chosen later on for games I excelled at.
Thanks for the clarification.
Thanks for the clarification.
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2014 5:52pm
The advantage to being picked last: you get to make everyone regret it once the game starts. Time and time again you outshine the competition, T. Great piece!
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20th Jan 2014 11:48pm
I'm glad you get it Rain but I also know what it feels like too, it's awful at times, thank you for reading, I appreciate your words.
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20th Jan 2014 8:00pm
the best i like is
ur acknowledging all readers
and that is a greatness
very few have
just keep ur flag flying miss
ur acknowledging all readers
and that is a greatness
very few have
just keep ur flag flying miss
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21st Jan 2014 00:21am
I guess what I meant to say is I write different things for myself, if other people enjoy what I write then that's wonderful. :-p
Re: Pick Me
21st Jan 2014 4:31am
I selected this one first from your poems.
It caught my attention as I was always picked dead last. I've got some old patterns of thinking and now I'll hear your words: "fucked again."
Like it a lot
It caught my attention as I was always picked dead last. I've got some old patterns of thinking and now I'll hear your words: "fucked again."
Like it a lot
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21st Jan 2014 4:35am
Sadly that game will always be played.Clicks are forever.I am glad you stopped by to read me, much appreciated jswissman.
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21st Jan 2014 5:03am
The appreciation is mine too Tommie. I've been writing poetry for awhile, but always in an isolation tank. Great to be part of a community of serious writers.
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