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Pieces of you
Not unlike Icarus,
We still want to fly
closer to the sun...
Transfixed as to why it burns,
Burning each other differently.
You asked me
"what possibly could I offer?"
I've got my answer now...
You.
Everything that is left over.
When everything else is spent.
When all you have left is a tired
goofy smile and just your
presence...
That’s what I’ll take.
I wish I could better describe
what you stir, but if you’ll
afford me this,
let me in...
Let me dine on
Pieces of you...
We still want to fly
closer to the sun...
Transfixed as to why it burns,
Burning each other differently.
You asked me
"what possibly could I offer?"
I've got my answer now...
You.
Everything that is left over.
When everything else is spent.
When all you have left is a tired
goofy smile and just your
presence...
That’s what I’ll take.
I wish I could better describe
what you stir, but if you’ll
afford me this,
let me in...
Let me dine on
Pieces of you...
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Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 2:51am
Tender and romantic
can feel the merge towards the center
Very nice write Ms. Glass
xo
Speak
can feel the merge towards the center
Very nice write Ms. Glass
xo
Speak
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20th Jan 2014 3:09am
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 3:04am
soft and sweet
a delicacy may be
a dessert afterwards
but the chicken
should be sizzling
don't u think
a delicacy may be
a dessert afterwards
but the chicken
should be sizzling
don't u think
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 3:07am
Thanks again...
Not everything has to sizzle; it can be a delicate simmer as not to split the cream.
Not everything has to sizzle; it can be a delicate simmer as not to split the cream.
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 3:11am
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20th Jan 2014 4:21am
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 3:17am
"Everything that is left over.
When everything else is spent."
Something about these two lines...
Something special about this poem...stirs me
When everything else is spent."
Something about these two lines...
Something special about this poem...stirs me
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 4:20am
A special person, with hesitation...
You'd have anything.
Thank you for your comments and reading jswissman, I really appreciate your time x
You'd have anything.
Thank you for your comments and reading jswissman, I really appreciate your time x
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 6:47am
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20th Jan 2014 10:19am
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 10:37am
Very beautiful poem, I like the beginning with the reference to Icarus, and the two last verses :
"Let me dine on
Pieces of you..."
And all between too!
"Let me dine on
Pieces of you..."
And all between too!
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 11:22pm
Thank you Malin, I always look forward to your comments...
Icarus was how best I could describe wanting more, time sometimes moves so slowly x
Icarus was how best I could describe wanting more, time sometimes moves so slowly x
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 10:57am
we take risks to make discoveries. & we never heed warnings, as when they told Columbus he would sail off the edge of the world...
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 11:22pm
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 12:18pm
Sweet...just the right heat,a bit crisp on the outside but still tender on the inside :)
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20th Jan 2014 11:23pm
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 1:03pm
Ahh, Miss Heart. Really like this ink. Really. There's a healthy serve of compassion fused adoration here, amongst other tastes. A delicious meal of sentiments to be sure. Serving or sitting , I'm hungry. Thanks Miss H.
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 11:25pm
Mr Sway, I'm touched by you stopping and reading. I really value your critique and time. Thank you x
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 3:43pm
you can't eat him...
he's burnt,
overdone by the
sun..:)
unlike your poem which is
just right...
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 11:26pm
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 4:09pm
Delicate write for delicate hearts, to savor the tender meats of ones love smothered in sweet caresses. beautiful write
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 11:27pm
It's always lovely to hear from you, I appreciate your comments... being so different x
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 7:15pm
Such a lovely, tender piece with soft-emotions.
Really loved reading this, Heart! Xo
Really loved reading this, Heart! Xo
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 11:28pm
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2014 8:06pm
This is true poetry, beautiful in its expression and full of emotion. For some reason I really love the word "Icarus," it's just a fun word. Well done !
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 11:38pm
The 'Icarus' reference was best to describe the heat and curiosity... is a little bit of fun.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment x
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment x
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 8:13pm
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20th Jan 2014 11:39pm
Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 8:59pm
Oh my gosh, this is DEEPLY romantic! You
pull sighs outta me without much effort
just from the love you're willing to give...
Loved it my friend :)
pull sighs outta me without much effort
just from the love you're willing to give...
Loved it my friend :)
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re: Re: Pieces of you
20th Jan 2014 11:41pm
Awww thank you for your reflection!
I sent this piece to him yesterday, much the same reaction...
Really appreciate your time xo
I sent this piece to him yesterday, much the same reaction...
Really appreciate your time xo
Re: Pieces of you
21st Jan 2014 11:26pm
I wish I could better describe
what you stir, but if you’ll
afford me this,
let me in...
Let me dine on
Pieces of you...
I love this very much
what you stir, but if you’ll
afford me this,
let me in...
Let me dine on
Pieces of you...
I love this very much
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re: Re: Pieces of you
22nd Jan 2014 00:01am
It is my favourite part too... I'd be happy with anything, being let in.
Thank you for reflecting, I'm moved by your commentary x
Thank you for reflecting, I'm moved by your commentary x
Re: Pieces of you
23rd Jan 2014 3:16am
There are some special people in our lives of whom we have to be satisfied with morsels of their affection and attention...it's worth every bite, usually :) And the want makes them all the more delicious. Brava Heart!
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re: Re: Pieces of you
29th Jan 2014 6:29am
Thank you Ms Worship... he is very tasty and is opening up. Worth every piece x
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Anonymous
29th Jan 2014 4:40am
Oh yes.....liking this for sure. I have said: " simple things shared in luv are the best". Enjoyed this! :)
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re: Re: Pieces of you
29th Jan 2014 6:29am
This is one of my favourite pieces... I couldn't stop the ink, it just came out.
Thank you very much for writing x
Thank you very much for writing x