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Thank you, Gabriel...

Poetically perfect~

Thanks for stopping by, Toasty. Welcome to DU...

Revolving thoughts I believe...Most of the time is our past who make them spin. (At least in my case)
Awesome literature atakti.

Our minds know the past well, round and round...

Thanks, Cesar

Great write
very very well written
last stanza is a tear jerking wall puncher

oh, and great title for this piece.

Cheers, nikki, and for the list add too...

I really like the first verse, which very subtly conveys the catharsis of looking sad; or, more precisely, how we neglect our appearances until we end up looking like we're in a cloak of sadness. This is a dark, subtle poem. That "her" isn't mentioned until the last line is a very effective device; it brings clarity to the poem with sudden, shattering effect.
My biggest concern would be that, to the casual reader, this poem might be a little vague. I, as your friend, know something about the subject matter, but if I didn't already have that knowledge I could have been left confused. Still, that confusion needn't have been a bad thing... Going back to that last line, not knowing might have made it even more striking. These are just my thoughts. Forgive me if they're rambling and useless!

Thank you, very much, Jenkin, for the in-depth look at this. You're right, of course, only the last her explains it all. I realized that but decided to go with it, figuring it held enough melancholy as it is.

I didn't mean to make the twist, but it's there, and I'm glad for it now...

Thanks.

Such an outstanding ink, n too much like how I've felt
many times... Bravo on this excellence my friend

So sorry you can relate, Poetik, but I suppose sooner or later, we all can...

Thank you.

You most likely did not mean it that way, but i couldnt help thinking of an embryo in the mothers womb, floating safe within....
strong write!

Mourganna, you must have a touch of psychic - I wonder sometimes. Although, this time, the clue has led you in the opposite direction, for it's about the death of a mother, not the birth of a child. It's the loss of safety...

Thank you.

steek mi poeitess luvlee wryte Rm

Thank you, rM...

big deep breath, deeper exhale...both just mediations of peace to you

Thank you for that, Sem, appreciate it...