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Renku : Smile of Gabi
One smile of Gabi
My heart is overwhelmed
Tears of happiness
And I am able to dance
On my desk at office
Modest gap of shirt
Peeking at her silky skin
Senses come undone
Feeling tension in my nerves
Along my spinal column
Her dress lifts slightly
Sudden view of her tulip
My sting becomes harder
I can't resist to take her
In my arms, clothes fall down
Heavenly entwined
My assegai sneaks subtly
In her sweet flower
All our pleasure just comes
By this sudden high surprise
Now we must take time
Increase all sensations
Intoxication
Orgasm is the organ point
Of a long search of delight
Published 11th Jan 2014
| Edited 12th Jan 2014
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11th Jan 2014 8:04am
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Anonymous
11th Jan 2014 6:51pm
This is quite sensual and a nice way of using renku format..you made a good use of letting the story flow naturally.
12th Jan 2014 00:54am
Yes, I think that I am more and more easy in this format of poem and the words come naturally in the frame of renku... Thank you for supporting me and for your nice comment, Vee!
12th Jan 2014 00:05am
This a very lovely and sensuous erotic piece and enjoyed reading it tremendously........... :)
12th Jan 2014 00:55am
When I read this, I do not think about how difficult it can be to write in this form. You and Renku are becoming one, malin!
12th Jan 2014 12:41pm
absinthe, this is probably one of the best comment I received about my poetry! Yes, it is hard to write! And so nice to give this feeling of easyness! Thank you so much
12th Jan 2014 8:50pm
Her dress lifts ...slightly
Sudden view of her tulip
My sting .....becomes harder ------!!!!!
Orgasm is the organ point
Of a long search of delight
sensuous
we think alike and both erect
at the very thought
perhaps u at sight
that soon in our minds
we'd inject the sweetness
that u call orgasm
I call sperm
Sudden view of her tulip
My sting .....becomes harder ------!!!!!
Orgasm is the organ point
Of a long search of delight
sensuous
we think alike and both erect
at the very thought
perhaps u at sight
that soon in our minds
we'd inject the sweetness
that u call orgasm
I call sperm
