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The Train A' Cumming
So you seek the power of a steam engine
delivering that fertile load
the sight of you is an incentive to produce
one glance and straight into full effect mode
Tantalizing with ample display of radiant sexiness
don't tell me that you never ever see
the conditions in the male of the species
the little man at attention with glee
Do you like the tease and suggestions
as you dance or move around the room
what advance would be most becoming
to ensure that the music isn't the only boom?
Steam yes is what you are craving
at the end of the night with a well endowed man
have you found one to your liking
maybe not just a one night stand?
delivering that fertile load
the sight of you is an incentive to produce
one glance and straight into full effect mode
Tantalizing with ample display of radiant sexiness
don't tell me that you never ever see
the conditions in the male of the species
the little man at attention with glee
Do you like the tease and suggestions
as you dance or move around the room
what advance would be most becoming
to ensure that the music isn't the only boom?
Steam yes is what you are craving
at the end of the night with a well endowed man
have you found one to your liking
maybe not just a one night stand?
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Re: The Train A' Cumming
31st Dec 2013 6:46pm
Good ink!
Fine erotica at its
BEST !
Hope your thinking
about a follow up!
Enjoyed ink on!
Fine erotica at its
BEST !
Hope your thinking
about a follow up!
Enjoyed ink on!
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re: Re: The Train A' Cumming
31st Dec 2013 6:53pm
Maybe---it is really hard for me to write and not be in the first person, but I will give it a try.
I truly appreciate your comment for normally on those occasions when I get it right in the eyes of others, it is many hours after I have published :)
I truly appreciate your comment for normally on those occasions when I get it right in the eyes of others, it is many hours after I have published :)
Re: The Train A' Cumming
31st Dec 2013 8:05pm
I like the last couple of line. You made it sound like shopping.:) I must say I've eavesdrop on similar conversations among ladies, here. As if its that simple. Enjoyed the read, Jazz. Happy New Year to You.
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re: Re: The Train A' Cumming
31st Dec 2013 10:45pm
since most of what I come up with in this genre is fictional, the shopping concept works for me!
Happy New Year to you as well
Happy New Year to you as well
Re: The Train A' Cumming
31st Dec 2013 9:10pm
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31st Dec 2013 10:47pm
okay, I was thinking more about the song by Peter Gabriel, but if you want to go back way further, it is all good (laugh)
Re: The Train A' Cumming
31st Dec 2013 9:18pm
"Tantalizing with ample display of radiant sexiness"<--sexy line...
Smoking Train....Xo
Smoking Train....Xo
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31st Dec 2013 10:48pm
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1st Jan 2014 1:08am
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1st Jan 2014 9:51am
Re: The Train A' Cumming
1st Jan 2014 6:05pm
Tantalizing with ample display of radiant sexiness
don't tell me that you never ever see
the conditions in the male of the species
the little man at attention with glee
Love it I'm a non smoker . But I think I need a cigar lol lol lol. Love it.
don't tell me that you never ever see
the conditions in the male of the species
the little man at attention with glee
Love it I'm a non smoker . But I think I need a cigar lol lol lol. Love it.
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re: Re: The Train A' Cumming
1st Jan 2014 9:06pm
Starting off the year in fine humor I see! Glad to know someone isn't joining in with the hookah craze!
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Anonymous
2nd Jan 2014 4:30am
Sometimes we're not looking for anyone ..we just do it because we can...
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2nd Jan 2014 5:24am
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Re: The Train A' Cumming
5th Jan 2014 10:00am
a very interesting read ... love the title there .. it looks very uniquely mysterious to me , especially at the first line
stanza ..
enjoyed as always ...
keep rolling
cyanide...
stanza ..
enjoyed as always ...
keep rolling
cyanide...
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re: Re: The Train A' Cumming
5th Jan 2014 3:59pm
Thanks; the title was a play on a Doobie Brother's song, "Long Train Runnin".
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5th Jan 2014 7:09pm
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Re: The Train A' Cumming
6th Jan 2014 1:58am
You sir, are well endowed..
yet you call your smarter brother
little one
it’s not the littleness that counts
but how the young one mounts
so sir holds your horse
as it lets out steam
and let your lovers
as you say are one nighters so scream
that all others think of a dream
as you are coming like steam
neighbors single ones
will also line up
the net day
for your warm ice cream
may i be permitted to post this
in the steam
for others to scream
yet you call your smarter brother
little one
it’s not the littleness that counts
but how the young one mounts
so sir holds your horse
as it lets out steam
and let your lovers
as you say are one nighters so scream
that all others think of a dream
as you are coming like steam
neighbors single ones
will also line up
the net day
for your warm ice cream
may i be permitted to post this
in the steam
for others to scream
1
re: Re: The Train A' Cumming
6th Jan 2014 3:31am
to be able to comment on a poem by producing another poem is something not seen everyday. Quite impressive!
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6th Jan 2014 4:02am
may I be permitted to post this
in the steam
for others to scream
the whole wide world
WWW.COM or www.com yahooooooooooooooo
sees me cumming everyday
since
I wasn't born yesterday
I cum any moment
as you say
keep cumming with your unique cumments any way...
thanks can I post the first one?
DO SAY
in the steam
for others to scream
the whole wide world
WWW.COM or www.com yahooooooooooooooo
sees me cumming everyday
since
I wasn't born yesterday
I cum any moment
as you say
keep cumming with your unique cumments any way...
thanks can I post the first one?
DO SAY
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6th Jan 2014 4:07am
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6th Jan 2014 4:52am
thanks
shall tomorrow
today's quota is over
good night Sir
nice to have kind friends
like you
shall tomorrow
today's quota is over
good night Sir
nice to have kind friends
like you
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